Help With Expository Essay?

Question

I need help with my expository essay. My topic is soccer. I don't know how to put this in an expository essay:

I started showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old. I showed my talent when I was playing with my friend in the park and beat him.

Some of the important times related to my talentis that when I beat my friend 3 to 0. Another important time is when I was playing in my old school's soccer team and beat the other team 3 to 1 and got the trophy for being the best soccer player in 4th grade.

Some of the forst things I learned while I was playing soccer is be in control of the ball while i'm running and do cool tricks such as keep the ball in the aor with my legs for a long time.

To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends in the park every saturday. My dad is the one who helped me in soccer.

Playing soccer makes me feel proud of myself because i'm very good at it.
I'm having alt of trouble writing my expository essay. Can you help me get started.

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Answer 1

Soccer...That's MY Sport
Some of the first things I learned while playing soccer involves running. It is essential to always be in control of the ball and to keep the ball in the air with my legs...a cool trick now and then never hurt to add a little excitement.

I started showing my talent in soccer when I was 7 years old, playing in the park with my friend. I beat him, and the talent continued to show.

Important events that I will always remember include beating my friend 3-0 and helping my old school's soccer team beat the opposing team 3 to 1. This got me a trophy in 4th grade for being the best soccer player.

To improve my skill, I play soccer with my friends in the park every Saturday.

My Dad helped me in soccer, and knowing that I'm good makes me proud of myself.

(Now, take these mini paragraphs and expand them. Make the person reading the paper "feel" what you feel. For example, tell the reader ABOUT the park. What images do you ALWAYS see when you play soccer? Are there any different things? Tell the reader about them / it. You're the artist, your paper is the canvas, and your pen is your brush). "Paint" the entire paper more fully. Imagine you are trying to receive an award for the best "painted" paper--an A + to an A. "Paint" away)!

Answer 2

I would do two things. One, invest in a spell-checker and learn to proofread (there's tons of mistakes in your post). Two, show this post to your teacher and ask her what to do next. You are in school to learn... if there is something you don't understand, make them show you. That is their responsibility to you.

You've got most of what you need already. You just need to organise it in the way your teacher wants. Your thoughts are somewhat disconnected - try to shift them around until it becomes a logical progression. So, first talk about how you love soccer, then put the stuff about how you got started, then maybe put the stuff about getting help from your dad and so on. That's called 'chronological order'... you put things in the same order in which they occured in history. There are other ways to organise your thoughts, and your teacher may have something specific in mind. Take what you've got now, and show it to them and ask for help.

You shouldn't have to ask things like this on here. There are people who are getting paid to help you with this stuff. I would take this whole post and everything to them and show it to them. You shouldn't get in any trouble for asking for help.