Piece Of Paradise...
After the tears from last night,
I saw my life in a different light,
Feeling tender after our fight,
But sure that I would be alright.
Painted pictures at my desk,
Recieted a list of things I detest,
About you and how we used to be,
And all the things that made me unhappy.
Who am I fooling, I couldnt be without you,
Your a piece of paradise and that I always knew,
Your silly ways
Entertain my days,
And without you,
I am the sea,
Without the blue.
2007-02-07 05:47:54 · 11 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I think that's REALLY good!! 10/10
2007-02-07 05:51:44 · answer #1 · answered by spiret629 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A scale 1 to 5 i give you a four in a half its good that you wrote down how you felt without putting down too much.
2007-02-07 14:00:10 · answer #2 · answered by Quita 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice a 10
2007-02-07 13:54:44 · answer #3 · answered by jody n 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's okay. You spelled recited wrong though. I hope you and your significant other make up. Cause it's no fun being without the one you love.
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2007-02-07 13:54:44 · answer #4 · answered by stuckondaeastcoast 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice.
2007-02-07 13:55:23 · answer #5 · answered by strange-artist 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow....this is a great poem!! your rhyme scheme and your word choices are excellent!! you should really consider entering this poem into a contest!
2007-02-07 13:51:55 · answer #6 · answered by wolvie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am not really into poetry, but I liked it. So that is saying something!
2007-02-07 13:56:18 · answer #7 · answered by slingshot 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not into poetry, but i think this poem is amazing.
2007-02-07 13:54:32 · answer #8 · answered by Paige 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good
2007-02-07 13:52:27 · answer #9 · answered by little lady 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked the ''But sure l would be alright'' part.
2007-02-07 13:52:17 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋