Storm
Lying down on darkness
Sitting still in a storm
The wind blowing away my stillness
Darkness my only sight
Shall the storm move away the dark
So I might hope for a light of insight?
Calmly lying down in a storm
My stillness only an illusion and a norm
My calm blown away by the wind
My calm and my restlessness
My illusion of quietness
Lying restless in the storm
Restlessly calm in a dark storm
My illusions of belonging to the norm
Blown away by the gentle wind
2007-02-06 21:09:33 · 4 answers · asked by Analyst 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I liked your poem, Prisoner, better.
The word choice in this one feels a bit forced in order to get a rhyme.
It reminds me (slightly) of a villanelle.
Please see my answer for your poem, Prisoner.
2007-02-06 23:42:04 · answer #1 · answered by Shell 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Bit hap hazard needs more work its hard to be still in a storm you should strengthen the howling and the thunder and the lightning and wet ever wet drowning my dreams ok Its a good try cheers Ill look for the next one
2007-02-07 05:37:59 · answer #2 · answered by burning brightly 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. Almsot follows enough rythm to be rap.
2007-02-07 05:22:55 · answer #3 · answered by bright_neon 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a very small storm
2007-02-07 05:31:23 · answer #4 · answered by kimht 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋