Hello. I am in 7th grade and needed help with a found poem that is about basketball. Can anyone help me by telling me how to improve it? Or if it's good or not, maybe a scale of 1-10. Please let me know if there is some words that should be replaced. This is the poem,
"This is my game.
I can cry after a loss
or win like a champ
It depends on the hustle
and how big my heart is.
This is my game.
I can go out to the blacktop courts
and shoot some hoops
just waiting till I hear that swish.
Or just dribble
till I hear the ball bouncing
as fast as a jackhammer.
Always trying to get ready
for my game
to show my MVP quality.
You can hate it or love it
but this is my game that I love
and will love till I die.
2007-02-06 12:48:47 · 9 answers · asked by Mistah Mistah 2 in Sports ➔ Basketball
WOW that sounds great ! I will rate this a 9 because I see you put your heart into it ! You will get the extra point from me when you get th A+ or win the contest. GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!
2007-02-06 12:53:32 · answer #1 · answered by Me777 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If it was found it's not your's and that would be cheating. As far as the poem goes itself, I would guess it is classified as free verse, as I can detect no rhyme or cadence in it.
A lot would depend on what your teacher wants you to turn in. Was the assignment on rhyme or cadence then you've got a failing grade.
Overall I'd score it a 3
2007-02-06 12:55:51 · answer #2 · answered by Old guy 124 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it an 8.5. It was very good and i could feel the passion. Just change jackhammer. Maybe instead of "as fast as a jackhammer", put "as fast as my beating heart". That adds more passion to it.
2007-02-06 12:55:57 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is my game, ill even play it, in the rain. This is my game, its my time to shine, my shooting needs improvement, but i think ill do just fine. I hear a swish, ill try to block it, even if i get mushed. i can go to courts, squeek my shoes, i had fun, win or lose.
(use some of these phrases)...otherwise, you have a .....7.5...BUt i loved it because it shows your passion for basketball. great job!
2007-02-06 13:11:43 · answer #4 · answered by K@T 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It shows your passion for basketball, but make the endings of the paragraphs a little smoother.
2007-02-06 12:54:53 · answer #5 · answered by canadiangeoguy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I guess it's a 9.5. But type of poem is it? If it's the right type of poem, than usre it's a 10 quality.
2007-02-06 13:14:51 · answer #6 · answered by Mani R 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Those breaks make the poem sound weird.
2007-02-06 12:51:46 · answer #7 · answered by hisownufo 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it needs more ryhming
2007-02-06 13:24:18 · answer #8 · answered by Colino 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
COOL
2007-02-06 12:51:29 · answer #9 · answered by amberharris20022000 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋