how can I write this lead with more peacefulness, description or with more detail. "It was a nice, brezzy, hot summerday in Cancun Mx. Heraring the waves hit the shore , with the nice breeze.
2007-02-06 09:41:23 · 6 answers · asked by A-Rod 2 in News & Events ➔ Media & Journalism
Perfection never met a day that better described It than this one. Palm trees swaying in the breeze, the sun high and hot, and the waves gently lapping against the sandy shore of Cancun, Mexico. The cool drinks would be arriving shortly and the fun was just about to begin!
2007-02-06 09:58:39 · answer #1 · answered by castlebeach 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Glimmering over the Cancun sand the sun warmed the afternoon breeze while roaring waves came to their sudden stop before hitting the shore once more.
2007-02-06 17:56:42 · answer #2 · answered by Jeancommunicates 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"It was a beautiful day, the wind ran through everyone's hair, the sun warmed the white sand of Cancun, Mexico. The gentle sloshing of the waves on the shore cause young children to giggle as they splashed their feet."
2007-02-06 17:55:47 · answer #3 · answered by hellomotto89 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
" The air was quiet & still, only the sound of heat cooled waves flooded the atmosphere, cauncun Mx was not the same as yesterday...."
2007-02-07 05:45:39 · answer #4 · answered by stiletto 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
use a thesaurus, breezy (spelling), summer day (2 separate words), leave off Mexico..Cancun is enough, take out 1st r in hearing, change hit (thesaurus)
2007-02-06 18:00:01 · answer #5 · answered by Raven 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Use a thesaures to spice it up a little. The first thing they teach you about writing is that sometimes less is more.
2007-02-06 17:55:24 · answer #6 · answered by Anna S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋