Can you guys please check my grammar on this essay?
Our brave soldiers might be fighting in Iraq at this moment. It would be much easier to enjoy your life if there weren't so many things trying to kill you every day. However, it would be a disaster if soldiers who had been sent to Iraq come back with fatal bacteria. According to the writer of “The Invisible Enemy”, Steve Silberman, the entire article is about the spread of anti-biotic resistant pathogens, a problem in hospitals here in the US and Europe. It is not specific to Iraq. It is about hundreds of thousands dying as a result of bacteria brought home from Iraq. Silberman wants his readers to realize how the bacteria can be dangerous to American as well as all over the world. He just listed problems, didn’t give solution about the problems. He should have covered the progress of growing bacteria.
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2007-02-05 16:23:16 · 5 answers · asked by needmorepill 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Our brave soldiers might be fighting in Iraq at this moment. It would be much easier to enjoy your life if there weren't so many things trying to kill you every day. However, it would be a disaster if soldiers who had been sent to Iraq cAme back with fatal bacteria. According to the writer of “The Invisible Enemy”, Steve Silberman, the entire article is about the spread of anti-biotic resistant pathogens, a problem in hospitals here in the US and Europe. It is not specific to Iraq. It is about hundreds of thousands dying as a result of bacteria brought home from Iraq. Silberman wants his readers to realize how the bacteria can be dangerous to American as well as THE REST OF the world. He just listed problems. HE didn’t give solution TO the problems. He should have covered the progress of growing bacteria.
2007-02-05 16:28:31 · answer #1 · answered by john galt 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Our brave soldiers might be fighting in Iraq at this moment. It would be much easier to enjoy your life if there weren't so many things trying to kill you every day. However, it would be a disaster if soldiers who had been sent to Iraq come back with fatal bacteria. According to the writer of “The Invisible Enemy”, Steve Silberman, the entire article is about the spread of anti-biotic resistant pathogens, a problem in hospitals here in the US and Europe. It is not specific to Iraq. It is about hundreds of thousands dying as a result of bacteria brought home from Iraq. Silberman wants his readers to realize how the bacteria can be dangerous to American as well as all over the world. He just listed problems, didn’t give solution about the problems. He should have covered the progress of growing bacteria.
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2007-02-06 00:26:06 · answer #2 · answered by jay Z 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It would be much easier to enjoy one's life if there were not so many things trying to kill us on a daily basis. Our brave soldiers may be fighting in Iraq at this moment; however, it would be a disaster if soldiers sent to Iraq returned with fatal bacteria.
antibiotics is one word, not hyphenated.
You contradict yourself when you say "It is not specific to Iraq" then say "....as a result of bacteria brought home from Iraq."
Antibiotic resistance is a growing problem throughout the world. I don't understand the Iraq connection. You need to make that more clear.
2007-02-06 00:36:33 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
grammar is adequate to convey the meaning, but structure of several sentences could use improvement. some sentences are grammatically acceptable but the addition of a descriptive word would clarify each of the inproperly constructed sentences and is needed. also use of a singular such as american should be changed to americans. adding the word but, before the last portion of the last section is also recommended so the it reads - but didn't give a solution for any problems. the last sentence is not needed and gives a subject change that should not be given.
your paragraph starts a pluralistic but switches to a singular then back to plural and back to singular. it makes the paragraph awkward and changing tenses is not done in english in a single paragraph. it shopuld be either one or the other but not both.
2007-02-06 00:39:35 · answer #4 · answered by de bossy one 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
For someone who doesn't speak English you are doing a pretty good job.
2007-02-06 00:29:14 · answer #5 · answered by Runa 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋