Like snow...
Your rosey smile in the night shone at me like a thousand stars,
It lit the room,
It lit my life,
Made something change and it felt right.
For once I didnt hold back
And you fell like snow into my heart,
Promised that we'd never part.
And that snow still lies there today,
A love that'll never melt away.
2007-02-05 10:51:48 · 14 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
very good.
2007-02-05 10:54:25 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
BEA utiful! very nice I give it a 9 bnecause it was perfect. I would maybe evem be more detailed to make it more exciting. It sounds like junior high level writing! and i luv how it rhymes!
2007-02-05 18:55:55 · answer #2 · answered by MEOW 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful, you should write some more and make a book out of them
2007-02-05 18:59:46 · answer #3 · answered by Chimpanzees? Monkey. 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that would b a 10 very beautiful
2007-02-05 18:54:36 · answer #4 · answered by Nora G 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8.8
I like the love that'll never melt away ending.
2007-02-05 18:55:01 · answer #5 · answered by Emily 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow. This makes the other one sound positively Shakespearean...congrats on taking banality to it's insipid limits.
2007-02-05 18:56:13 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good id keep the next one to my self some *** whole will publish it and put there name on it hopeful not
2007-02-05 19:16:19 · answer #7 · answered by sarah 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is ok, not my cup of tea but every poem has a critic and a fan... so keep at it maybe see if you can get published somewhere..
good luck
2007-02-05 18:55:27 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice, and heartfelt - I wish I could write something mean and nasty - but it was so cute - I can't.
2007-02-05 18:55:33 · answer #9 · answered by Skeezix 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its pretty...but the beat is off
whenever you read over a poem...you should be able to clap your hands to a steady beat...
unless it is a song then they can have whatever beat..
2007-02-05 18:57:02 · answer #10 · answered by iwaskillin-before-killinwascool 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
That was beautiful!â¥I really love that = )
2007-02-05 18:55:19 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋