this is just a small excerpt... he doesnt think he is any Good and im trying to convince him otherwise. thanx
he almost pushed himself up with his sword , he couldnt move , it was as if he had no energy at left within him at all , he looked up and saw what had happened , thousands of bodies laied over the feild , he stared up at the sky .using the sword he pushed himself to his feet . he surveyed the field of bodie as it started to rain , "even the gods cry at this sight" he thought to himself.
so what do you think? do you think he is any Good? do u think he has potential. please tell me what u think because im going to show him this! thankyou in advance. =]
2007-02-04 18:23:20 · 10 answers · asked by becstar 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
To start with, Im a freelance writer myself just for the love of it!
Your imagination and level of creativity is worth a mention! You also have captivating usage of words and phrases to hold any avid readers attention!
You are capable of making writing your career or maybe write interesting books, however, you need to refine your language usage, punctuation, spellings, grammar etc. For a person like you, I dont think it would be much of a problem to brush up on these little pointers! Coz, I notice you have a natural talent, and I also noticed that, the friend of yours is none other than "you"!
Enjoy your writing and keep up the good work! If you really really looking at a career in writing, simply brush up on these minor points, and Im sure you would be going places with ur skills!
Best of Luck, dude!
2007-02-04 19:01:24 · answer #1 · answered by Maverick 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I completely agree with Maverick.
Although the spelling and grammar needs correcting, it is still a story with a lot of potential. I especially like the line "even the gods cry at this sight..."
My only advice would to be to read as many novels as you can and it will help improve your writing and remember to ignore the needlessly vicious comments and never give up!
Good luck and I hope one day you get published.
2007-02-04 22:08:58 · answer #2 · answered by briar_gregory 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's not much here, so it's hard to draw any firm conclusions, however, what is here isn't very good. The structure of the paragraph is poor, there is a major run-on, the wording is bland, and the spelling is atrocious. (I can let bad spelling slide)
Here's the good news: Everyone stinks when they start writing. Writing isn't something you're born with like singing, dancing, or drawing. It takes patience and lots of practice to hone it into a worthwhile skill. If your friend takes a few writing classes and keeps at it, there is no reason he can't be publishable some day.
2007-02-04 18:49:40 · answer #3 · answered by wordweaver_three 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
That she's a woman. all the different characters interior the tale are below the impact that she (Juliet) is unquestionably a youthful guy (Julian) BQ - i like that she will easily keep on with by potential of with something and that she has the middle to make her aims come actual. She doesn't wait round for a fairy godmother or a mystical lamp to grant her 3 desires, yet she takes her aims by potential of the scruff of the neck and can cause them to take position. What i like least about her is that she lies and deceives human beings. she will do very virtually something to get what she needs (her aims) and could keep her actual id secret in any respect prices. She is likewise quite a coward (she calls it self-upkeep), yet when her existence is threatened she will very virtually always run away and canopy. i'm attempting to slowly kick that out of her and make her braver in spite of the undeniable fact that....
2016-10-17 05:21:46 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The best thing for him/her is to take many writing courses. English, speech, article writing and so on, are great ways to be a great writer. What about the writing itself here? Did you just copy it or is this how he truly wrote it. There is great need for punctuation, capitalization, and for subject and other items as well. Writing takes learning. College writing classes are the greatest way to become a writer. Start studying.
2007-02-04 18:30:33 · answer #5 · answered by grannywinkie 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Who are you trying to kid? Me thinks you are the friend. If not then you both attended the same school of grammatical and spelling mistakes.
2007-02-04 20:58:12 · answer #6 · answered by burtbb0912 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
the story was awesome!
I would read it more if it comes out in a book as a whole story.
2007-02-04 18:26:48 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you wont like this but your friend should try cooking, painting, gardening, any thing other than writing
2007-02-04 18:28:14 · answer #8 · answered by da rinse mode 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Very good... im sure he will do very well..
2007-02-04 18:28:52 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry..
2007-02-04 18:27:06 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋