should i enter this poem in the contest?

Question

THe Last Laugh



u did not try to stop me and u did not try to call me back i was wating by the phone to see who would get the last laugh so i waited and my gods did ring for me they say if i should wait one more time my heart will break eventully so u see it is u who thought will get the last laugh but i have gotten my heart to mend as gods wounds mend prety fast

so young madien no one truly gets the last laugh

what do u think of this poem

what emotions do u htink i convey what do u think i am trying to say

Answer 1

Yup! good poem.
gotta be a vengance ode to a lover who has rejected the writer

Answer 2

I think it's a really good poem, but it's confusing to read the way you have it laid out. Maybe add some punctuation, or if you don't want to do that, then split it up line by line. I see that you probably want it read all at once for effect, but I think it would be a lot better with natural breaks. Without separate lines of punctuation the reader doesn't know when to take breaks and pauses, and because it is too long to be read without any pauses, I end up taking them at the wrong spots. I think you should read it aloud the way you want it to be heard and add the proper punctuation and/or stanzas. But that being said, I think the content is great. (also you spelled 'pretty' and 'eventually' wrong. If you want 'eventaully' to be pronounced 'eventully' then you need to imply that by writing it this way: 'event'ully'. If this poem was just for you I wouldn't be so picky, but if you enter it in a contest it should look professional. And I think there is a grammatical error is 'gods wounds'. If it is singular then it should read 'god's wounds mend pretty fast' and if gods is meant to be plural then it should read 'gods' wounds mend pretty fast')

Answer 3

Overall, I like it but the structure leaves much to be desired and if it were mine I would probably enter it even though I doubt it will get a blue ribbon.
Perhaps an honorable mention but punctuation was invented for a reason.
And I would have asked this question in the education section under English.

Answer 4

Off course... Winning or losing not important. It is your rights to express your mind and feeling as long not humiliating somebody else, etc. It is your result for your hardwork, except you cheating. Let everyone know what your feeling by using words. And let everyone know what the beauty essence in those words.

I wrote like this because you enter it at philosopy forum.

Answer 5

i for my area, truly, truly LOVE THIS POEM!!! it really is beautiful. You seize growing to be up thoroughly! i'm in worry-free words 14 too, and that i ought to not in any respect imagine of writing something soooooo shifting. i imagine of i visit cry!! you ought to definitly enter it. And positioned up it. And promote it. it really is tremendous. solid success at your contest, regardless of the indisputable fact that you do not decide on it. Karis F.

Answer 6

I'm sorry, but the use of "u" is distracting, because your blank verse does not relate to chat-shortened words. Overall, the poem needs development.

Answer 7

sure why not. pretty good poem, very emotional. just maybe a little work on spelling will make it the best ever!=) good luck.

Answer 8

if you value honest answers, don't waste time entering it anywhere. it is rather too plain, too plastic, too cosmetic and too pedestrian. what are these u and i and gods in a poem if they are just mere cosmetics, no profundity, no metaphor . . . .try prose or something else. am sorry if this dampens your spirit but its my frank assessment.

Answer 9

yes you should thats really good. it's a lot better than what i could ever write. you should try even if you dont think you can win. you never know you could win=] good luck

Answer 10

Spell check it and then enter it.