Hi i'm 14 and i've always wrote songs can someone rate my lyrics please and see if i could be a successful songwriter :)
A strage feeling:
i know tht you
like to see me
and you know that i
like to see you too
and s i get lost in your eyes
its so easy to see
[chorus]
that its a strange feeling
and i can't explain
what i can see in your eyes
and you know it takes away the pain
and it feels like your shining over me
like a star in the midnight sky
oh its a strange feeling
so close your eyes but dont forget
that we are meant to be
and although your lost
you can be found
cause you know i'll be
right by your side
oh
[chorus]
oh i dont know why
it feels so right
to be here with you tonight
[chorus]
2007-02-02 03:00:28 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Yes that is pretty ok. But now you've shown it to a lot of people, anyone could write it and say it is theirs now!
2007-02-02 03:14:13 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
They seem good and scan well. It's a little hard to tell without music but I'd say they were sound. My only criticism, and I know I'm a bit old fashioned here, is that you obviously did not read them through before you posted - you've got missing letters, extra letters and no punctuation. Presentation does matter - it gives you an edge over the person who does not bother. Good luck.
2007-02-02 03:14:19 · answer #2 · answered by shoeey2001 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think those lyrics are very good. It is just your spelling needs tidying up but that is a minor thing. I would grade the lyrics-nine out of ten. Keep on writing. All you need is a good tune, a good band and a good song and you will be rolling in fame and dosh. Good luck.
2007-02-02 03:08:18 · answer #3 · answered by Birdman 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its hard to rate lyrics without knowing the melody.....but as for lyrics go it sounds alot similar to about 80% of boyband lyrics if thats your thing than cool! but if you tried harder you could make it sound more original then it is. And yes you could be a songwriter just work at expressing yourself through your lyrics and make them original. Just write write write you'll notice yourself getting better and better. And I'm not trying to sound mean by saying they are unoriginal but they arent really that original.....good luck....just some constructive critisism(spelling?)
2007-02-02 03:09:41 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad for a kid. Not bad at all. I am interested in know what beat you had in you head at that time. Snaps to you young-en. Keep up the good work and I'm sure before long I will be singing along to one of you songs on the radio.
2007-02-02 03:07:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Alright. It's hard without the beat and tempo and melody, but overall it's worth a good 8/10.
2007-02-02 03:31:38 · answer #6 · answered by gamer92 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good gob. Would like to hear it to music to see how the stanzas flow and fit. Hopefully you will also learn to play an instument (if you haven't already) and study music theory so you recognize your full potential.
2007-02-02 03:09:28 · answer #7 · answered by fullerboot 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I see this as a Daniel Beddingfield style song. Brilliant.
2007-02-02 03:12:34 · answer #8 · answered by theearlof87 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW! im also 14 and i cant spit out N E thing that good! WAY TO GO! you get a 10!
2007-02-02 03:06:52 · answer #9 · answered by Shawnee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is so beautiful, you are very talented, young man. Good luck, for the future.
2007-02-02 03:12:22 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋