help correct English grammar,thx?

Question

whats wrong with the following sentences, if any, plz help amend them.
my teacher indicated those mistakes by highlighting them.

1.Once becoming poor, what could you do?
I just dont get: for instance, 'Picking up the textbool, the teacher started to read'. This's a correct one, anyway i can't tell the difference.

2. What sets entirely us apart from... highlighting ENTIRELY

3.There has been much concern about the gap between the rich and the poor is broadening. teacher highlighted ABOUT, is THAT better or the only correct one?

4. It deems the main reason for worsing poverty. highlighting DEEMS and WORSING

5. The rich has influence over..... highlighting HAS

6. All basic necessaries of life are associated with business with the rich. highlighting WITH THE RICH , what i meant is 'the business is run by the rich.

7. Having built good train system. teacher arrowd between BUILT and GOOD indicating a lack of preposition or something.

Answer 1

1. "Once becoming poor" is a participial phrase (present participle: -ing; past part. -ed), it is not a CLAUSE because the subject is implied; in other words, the subject of the participial phrase MUST BE the same as the subject of the independent clause that follows:

Once becoming poor, you have to ask yourself, "what could I do"?
Once becoming poor, you have to decide what to do.
Once becoming poor, (s)he has to decide what to do.
Once becoming poor, we have to decide what to do, etc.

2. "entirely" may be placed after "us" or after "apart";
3. after "concern", the preposition is "for";
4. it seems ... for worsening (the verb is "to worsen");
5. "The rich" (= wealthy people); the verb is in the plural;
6. "... business, run (or controlled) by the rich";
7. "Having built a (indefinite article) good train system": you must use the indefinite article here.

Answer 2

1.Once becoming poor, what could you do?
I just dont get: for instance, 'Picking up the textbool, the teacher started to read'. This's a correct one, anyway i can't tell the difference.

It doesn't read like a full sentence to me. Maybe you could have written: "If you were to become poor, what could you do?"




2. What sets entirely us apart from... highlighting ENTIRELY

It's not grammatical. Just drop the word entirely: "What sets us apart from..."


3.There has been much concern about the gap between the rich and the poor is broadening. teacher highlighted ABOUT, is THAT better or the only correct one?

I would put: "There has been much concern about the gap between the Rich and the Poor widening" or "There has been much concern that the gap between the Rich and Poor is widening"


4. It deems the main reason for worsing poverty. highlighting DEEMS and WORSING

Deems isn't the right word to use: I would say, "It SEEMS the main reason for poverty WORSENING" or "it SEEMS the main reason why poverty is WORSENING"

5. The rich has influence over..... highlighting HAS

"The Rich HAVE influence over.." You're talking about a group of people so you are saying that 'they' have infuence therefore you need the correct part of the verb - HAVE. If you were talking about one person, you could say "he HAS influence over"

6. All basic necessaries of life are associated with business with the rich. highlighting WITH THE RICH , what i meant is 'the business is run by the rich.

The word 'necessaries' is wrong, it should be "NECESSITIES"

I would say: "All basic NECESSITIES of life are associated with business, which is run by the Rich"....but I don't understand that sentence, sorry!

7. Having built good train system. teacher arrowd between BUILT and GOOD indicating a lack of preposition or something.

Should read: "Having built A good train system". Try subsituting the word 'good' for something else though, such as 'an effective" or "an efficient"

I'm no expert but I hope that helps!

Answer 3

1. Once becoming poor, what could you do?
I just don’t get: for instance, 'Picking up the textbook, the teacher started to read'.

2. What sets us entirely apart from...

3. There has been much concern about the gap between the rich and poor broadening.

4. It deems that the main reason for poverty becoming worse.

5. The rich have influence over

6. All the basic necessities of life associated with business, are controlled by the rich.

7. Having built a good train system.

give that lot a go lmao

Answer 4

1. Once becoming poor, what could you do?

The problem is using 'Once' and 'becoming' together.
You use 'once' with an adjective to show something has just changed.
Examples: Once eaten,...; Once discovered,...; Once poor,...
Once poor, what could you do? is a valid sentence.

It is better, however, to change 'Once' to 'On', in this case.
'On becoming poor, what could you do?'
This gives the idea that something has just happened, or is in the process of happening.
Examples: On seeing the light; On hearing the sound; On writing the sentence;

2. What sets entirely us apart from...

This sentence uses a phrasal verb 'to set apart'.
This type of verb only permits an object to be placed in the middle. So: It sets us apart; We set them apart; They set it apart.
Any adverbs, like 'entirely', must come after the subject:
What entirely sets us apart from...
Or, more commonly, after the complete verb:
What sets us apart entirely from...
Never place adverbs in the middle of phrasal verbs.

3. There has been much concern about the gap between the rich and the poor is broadening.

If you want to use 'about', the sentence can be changed to:
There has been much concern about the broadening gap between the rich and the poor.
'Broadening' becomes the adjective to 'the gap', and so 'the broadening gap between the rich and poor', becomes one subject.
However, to emphasize the fact that 'the gap' is in the process of broadening, change 'about' to 'that'.
There has been much concern that the gap between the rich and the poor is broadening. This basically puts two statements together: 'There has been much concern' + 'The gap between the rich and poor is broadening'

4. It deems the main reason for worsing poverty.

Here, the verb 'deem' is an active verb, when it should be passive. Actively, 'to deem' will require an object, when used to mean 'to regard'.
Examples: I deem you; It deemed me; We are deeming it.
If it is the object being deemed by someone, then it must be used passively: 'It is deemed the main reason...'
Secondly, 'worsing' is not a word. The verb is 'to worsen'. Therefore, the participle is 'worsening' The correct sentence is:

It is deemed the main reason for worsening poverty.

5. The rich has influence over...

'The rich' is a plural verb. So it is the same as 'They have influence over...' Correct sentence:

The rich have influence over...

6. All basic necessaries of life are associated with business with the rich.

I think you are trying to say:
All basic necessities of life are associated with businesses that are rich.
You can more simply say:
All basic necessities of life are associated with rich businesses.

7. Having built good train system.

If you are talking about one particular train system, you must add 'a' after the verb:
Having built a good train system.
If you want to describe many train systems, simply add an 's':
Having built (some) good train systems.

Answer 5

1. A sentence needs a subject, verb and object. It is not clear what you are trying to convey. Do you mean that having become poor the options open to the individual are greatly reduced?
2. Entirely is redundant - that means it is not needed in the sentence. If you want to use it put it between what and sets i.e. "what entirely sets us apart" but it would be a better sentence without it.
3. That is the correct word. Alternatively, if you want to keep the word about then "is broadening" should change to "broadening" although gaps are said to widen not broaden.
4. Worsing isn't a word - do you mean worsening? By deems do you mean considers? With these changes it is still not a sentence. Assuming that the IT refers to a noun previously specified e.g. "The government considers the main reason for worsening poverty....... " you then need a verb and an object to complete the sentence e.g." .....is the massive increase in single parent households"
5. Rich is plural so you should write "The rich have influence over...."
6. Whilst I can't agree with your intended statement, to communicate what you intended I suggest "....are associated with businesses run by the rich"
7. It should be "Having built a good train system". If it was plural it would have been "good train systems"
Lots of reading will make the use of the proper words second nature. Good on you for wanting to find out where the errors lay - you are going to do well in life!!! Good luck.

Answer 6

right, here are my answers:

1. once becoming poor, what CAN you do? 'could' indicates the past, which seems in contradiction with the first part of the sentence, which is present. also, i am not too sure about eh word 'becoming' used with 'once'. you could try this sentence:L 'once you have become poor, what can you do?'

2. what sets us entirely apart from... it justs eems to me that the words 'entirely' and 'us' were the wrong way around. the way you had the sentence, when they were the wrong way round, it can be read that 'us' is a people set apart from absolutely everything, whereas the way i ahev written it shows that you are talking about somethign specific.

3. i would agree here that 'that' is a better word.

4. here, i am not sure what context the sentence has in the paragraph, however just on its own, i would suggest:
it SEEMS the main reason for WORSENING poverty is... and then give a reason. if you wanted to use this sentence as an addition to a reason, replace if with 'which' and still use 'seems'. in order to use 'deems', you need a governing body or person to make that statement of the reason for the worsening poverty.

5.the rich HAVE influence over... 'has' indicates just one person, whereas the rich is indicative of many. i know the new sentence sounds a bit weird, but it is actually right.

6. try this: 'all basic NECESSITIES of life are businesses run by the rich.' i got what you meant with 'necessaries' but i felt the new word was better. this sentence jsut needed some rewording.

7. you need an 'a' between built and good: having built A good train system.

i hope this helps you :)

Answer 7

1. Picking up the textbook, the teacher started to read "This is a correct one, anyway I can't tell the difference."
2. What sets us entirely apart from.... Position of entirely
3. The word "that" should have been used instead of "about".
4. It seems that the main reason for worsening poverty....
5. The rich have influence over....
6. All the basic necessities of life are associated with business and the rich...
7. Having built a good train system....

Answer 8

1. I'm not sure but the phrase "once becoming poor" just doens't scan right. "After you have become poor" maybe?
2. What is the word 'entirely' even doing in that sentence? It doesn't fit.
3. Yes 'that' is better, about only fits if you don't finish with 'is broadening'
4. To deem means to think. What does it deem the main reason for worsening poverty is? It makes the sentence incomplete. No such word as worsing, you mean worsening.
5. "The rich" is plural, so it's have
6. try businesses of the rich. it just doens't make sense the other way.
7. "a" is a good preposition to put in there.

hope that helps

Answer 9

2. What sets us entirely apart from
3. There has been much concern over the broadening gap between the rich and the poor.
4. The main reason for worsening
5. The rich have influence over
6. associated with affluent businesses
7. Having built a good train system

Answer 10

1. question doesn't make sense!

2. entirely is spelled correctly.

3.that is better.

4. you mean seems not deems. a person deems something to be something, but it cannot be used as a verb, ie i deem is not acceptable. poverty as a noun should be worsening.

5.the rich - plural - have influence. someone - singular - has influence.

6.she should have highlighted necessaries, you mean necessities. i assume you meant for rich people.

7. indicating a lack of the simple a