Honestly, it has all the right information but the form is not that great, i dont know if you wanted to be rated on grammar, spelling, content or format but i guess it would depend also on what grade level.
first word should be capitalized, painting is missing an i, you use the word Baroque to start 3 sentences in a row, i would use the same information but put it into a format which sounds comfortable when read aloud
2007-02-01 13:04:25
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answer #1
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answered by theburlaces 3
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Capitalizing the corrections:
Baroque is a style of the arts such as panting, music, and dancing during the 17th and 18th centuries. Baroque represents A wide range of styles and artistS. Baroque had three main forms: RELIGIOUS: THE Roman Catholic Church decided arts should show religious themes in emotional environment.
REVOLUTION TEChNIQUE: Baroque had a technique for illumination of figures out of deep shadow.
LIfe: Baroque that was developed mainly in Flemish countries emphasiZED THE realism of everyday life and was useD for advances in science such as THE standardized measurement.
[Note my punctuation corrections as well.]
You have a good start here. Develop with additional examples.
2007-02-01 13:05:22
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answered by Anonymous
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Baroque is a style of the arts that includes painting, music and dancing from a period from the 17th through the 18th century. Baroque represents wide ranges of styles and artists.
Religious
The Roman Catholic Church decided that the arts should show religious themes in an emotional environment.
Revolution Technique
Baroque has a technique that showcases illumination of ...
Life
Baroque that was developed, mainly in Flemish countries, emphasizes...
It was also used for advances in science including advances in standardized measurement.
2007-02-01 13:05:51
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answered by TygerLily 4
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2016-11-02 02:28:14
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answered by atalanta 4
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Well, each paragraph holds atleast 5-8 sentences. Make sure you write them in complete sentences.
2007-02-01 13:16:59
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answered by bluesunflower 2
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Well, I'm not sure it's really one paragraph, but it is informative. Try reformatting a little and and don't forget to do a spell check. Then it'll be great.
2007-02-01 13:08:38
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answered by ninjin.maki 1
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OKAY, so first check your spelling and form. Content seems about right to me.
2007-02-01 13:02:44
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answer #7
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answered by mountain woman 3
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thats not ONE paragraph...thats like a bunch on teeny ones
2007-02-01 13:01:34
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answered by Marie 3
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Sounds okay to me.
2007-02-01 13:01:54
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answered by Anonymous
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yeah just add a little more plzzzzzzzzzzzzz
2007-02-01 13:01:14
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answered by Anonymous
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