The sentence:
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building where the entire hall is referred as the “art hall” and the students hanging around the hall as the “art kids.”
or how should I revise it? it just doesn't sound right to me...
2007-02-01 09:02:07 · 16 answers · asked by Heather K 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
is this better?
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building, where the entire hall is referred to as “the art hall.” The students who spend large portions of their time spending time in the hall are known as “the art kids” due to their artistic talent and unusual taste in clothing.
2007-02-01 09:16:47 · update #1
oops here
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building, where the entire hall is referred to as “the art hall.” The students who spend large portions of their time in the hall are known as “the art kids” due to their artistic talent and unusual taste in clothing.
2007-02-01 09:17:35 · update #2
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building known as the “art hall” and the students hanging around the hall are known as the “art kids.”
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building known as the “art hall” where the“art kids” hang out.
2007-02-01 09:06:01 · answer #1 · answered by JK 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building where the entire hall is referred TO as the “art hall” and the students hanging around the hall as the “art kids".
It doesn't make clear where the classroom is in relation to the hall. Is it part of the hall, in the hall, near the hall?
2007-02-01 17:11:37 · answer #2 · answered by Bethany 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building where the entire hall is referred TO as "the art hall." The students that are commonly found mingleing in the art hall are referred to as "the art kids."
I would divide it into two separate sentences & I would change "hanging around" to something that sounds a little more politically correct. Just my opinion. Hope I helped.
2007-02-01 17:08:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kind of You might want to break it down so it sounds like.....
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building where the entire hall is referred as the "art hall". All the student hang around the hall as the "art kids".
If you only need one sentence then add commas!
2007-02-01 17:08:17 · answer #4 · answered by Dee 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building. The entire hall is referred as the “art hall”, and the students hanging around the hall are referred to as the “art kids.”
thats my revision. i thought it was a run-on sentence. good kuck with it, though!
2007-02-01 17:08:13 · answer #5 · answered by :) 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The classroom is located at the southern end of the building. It's in the "art hall" where all of the students known as "art kids" hang around.
2007-02-01 17:06:55 · answer #6 · answered by robnyc 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The minimum correction needed for grammar is at the end -- the hall are known as the "art kids".
Here is other possibility:
The classroom is located in the south end of the school building in the hall referred to as, "the art hall", while the students hanging around the hall are known as, "the art kids”.
note the punctuation around the quotes, however you really don't need them.
The classroom is located in the south end of the school building in the hall referred to as the art hall, while the students hanging around the hall are known as the art kids.
This one is OK, too.
2007-02-01 17:13:48 · answer #7 · answered by tlbs101 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the school building, at the southern end the entire hall is referred to as the "art hall". all the students hanging round are referred to as the "art kids", thats where the classroom is located.
Put in what type of classroom it is hope this helps
2007-02-01 17:08:11 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yea, sorry it's not the proper form of writing. here, let me help you by rewriting it for you: The classroom is located in the southern end of the school building, where the entire hall is referred to as the "art hall." The students hanging around the hall are known as the "art kids."
^the sentence was a run-on sentence, which means it never ends. you need some periods and commas in there, hun. hope i helped you! :)
2007-02-01 17:07:24 · answer #9 · answered by A Girl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
here is how i think you should revise it.
The classroom is found in the southern end of the school building where the entire hall is referred as the "art hall." The students that are around the art hall are called the "art students."
2007-02-01 17:11:09 · answer #10 · answered by sally 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋