do you like this?, it kinds of poem but i don't think it's good as poem.
Do you know how long you have left?
Do you know how many days i been cry?
And do you know? i wish you to be back.
since you leaved and since you gone, do you know one person is behind you?
I don't know why it hurt deep inside
And why do i have to cry each night?
I will leave your sight because it hurted my mind.
Your smile also hurt my feeling
I am being lonely on this time , i know not the only me be sadness.
But there are more people who is worse more than me.
I understand how much it hurted.
ON this time.... this VALENTINES just only wish you to be back...... back in my soul.......
HAVE A GOOD TIME ON VALENTINES EVERYONE!!
2007-02-01 02:29:47 · 5 answers · asked by 2Q 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Cultures & Groups ➔ Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, and Transgender
A person fell in love
2007-02-01 02:34:24 · answer #1 · answered by anubhav_55 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok, good little tale of love lost and unrequited.
But the grammatical errors kinda take the edge off of it!
I've adapted it for you...what do you think???..
Do you know how long you've been gone?
Do you know how many days i've been crying for you?
Do you know how much i wish you were still here with me?
Since you left, since you've been gone, i've been left behind longing for you!
I don't know why it hurts so deep inside, why i cry myself to sleep each night, missing you.
But i'll leave your sight because you hurt my mind,
the sight of you hurts my heart,
your smiles hurt my feelings.
I know I'm lonely without you.
But i'm not the only lonely one in the world,
there are others out there who have pain worse than mine.
I feel their pain, I know that hurt.
You gave it to me, now it's all i have.
The pain of love.
On this VALENTINES day i just wish you were back with me....
back in my soul....my heart....my missing LOVE.
2007-02-01 10:58:54 · answer #2 · answered by Sight 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's expressive of sorrow at the loss and pining for its return. I don't know what kind of patois it's written in though.
Valentine's Day is two weeks away!
2007-02-01 11:01:41 · answer #3 · answered by unclefrunk 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is good, very touching. Happy valentines, too.
2007-02-01 10:41:42 · answer #4 · answered by Pato FV 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Loved and lost. But the grammer is something else.
2007-02-01 10:38:41 · answer #5 · answered by Extra Blue Note 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋