Do you like this poem.?

Question

I wrote it.

senior year

i look back on these years with regret now
as i never have before
all the people i met
i never really got to know
all the things i could do
i never did
and its too late now
this part of my life is over
gone forever
opportunities offered me here
will never come again
i wasted so much time here
doing nothing
or things i could do anytime
but the things i could have done
the friends i could have made
the memories i could have shared
are slipping from my grasp
i guess they have been for years
i just never really noticed
or never really cared
until now
but whats the point its almost over
i try to make up for lost time
but in the end its too late
ive missed out on so much
and its all my fault
i shouldve done more
always held back
by something
or someone
i look and i see everyone in their place now
talking, laughing with their friends
they've known each other forever
they're in their place
a place i so wish i had
a place that was offered me so many times
by so many people
yet i never took it
why i never took it
i will never know
because i want it more than anything now
but who am i to say that
after all these years
i don't deserve it
i had almost 15 years to take it
go there
with my arms wide open
but i never could
always held back by
pride
or guilt
or obligation
or shyness
or self hatred
now where am i?
miserable
on the sidelines
never really part of the circle
standing there
like a pathetic beggar
wishing i had a home
or i am alone
quietly hating myself for all the years
and the friendships i missed
that i can never have again
it went by so fast
i always thought i'd have another year
another month
another day
but soon i will no longer have that
if i had one wish
before i leave this place
my friends
i would want them to know how much i like them
and how much I hate myself
for not showing them
because i worry they don't know
and that will be their last memory of me
yet they probably never will know
because i am weak
but
maybe you still like me
and maybe there is a final chance
but i feel that every step i take
every minute that goes by that chance gets so much smaller
and it breaks my heart
that we will go on
and never be friends
and none of you will know what you meant to me
but it is what i have earned
my years of apathy
have brought me to this lonely place
and all i can say to you kids is
have fun
make friends
make memories
because
if you dont
high school
and everything that comes with it
will be gone
forever
and you will regret it
as i do now
if you do not
i fear
you will have a cold, sad, and lonely
senior year

Answer 1

No. It's too long, and it doesn't have any real rhyme scheme. But don't let me discourage you though. I'm not a professional, and you have a decent message.

Answer 2

I loved the poem, it was great. It was me exactly my senior year and for the longest time i felt that way then, along the line somewhere i realized that the friends that i did had even the very close ones wouldnt be around much longer as we all went our separate ways to college or work or w/e we chose to do after graduation. You can be sad for the longest time, feel you have no friends, think that you could have done soo much better if just given another chance... but in the end you'll realize that, everything is exactly the way you wanted it to be, nothing will be out of place. So, cheer up :-)

Answer 3

The poem is great. Any form of poetry is beautiful if it expresses how you really feel. I feel that way sometimes but here's the thing. There was this song I learned a long long time ago that goes... Make new friends but keep the old one is silver and the others gold... You can always make new friends and it is NEVER too late to tell someone how you feel about them. Heed these words, do not get "out of touch" with the people you really care about. High School isn't your whole life, but there are some people who are irreplaceable.

Answer 4

I'm sorry, but to be frank, the poetry is good, however your thinking is very self-destructive. When you keep thinking this way you will waste another minute, hour, days and years of life you have left in your life. Rather than regrets, accept that you cannot change the past and live in the present. Smile to the people you see everyday. Ask them how they are doing, be concerned and geniunely interested in who they are. Accept your feelings and do it despite of it. Start with a simple smile and "hello". There is more to life than the past, re-living it in your mind will destroy what you have now and build more negative past for you. So what? High school is over....College is can be awesome. "Carpe Diem" my friend and each moment will be filled with joy, then you will have more happy memories to add each day and each moment than just this.

Answer 5

What NoWhere said!!

"... because I am weak..." Child, we are all weak -- in our own way, some more visibly than others, and no, never dispersed equally.

The reason we are told to "accept our weaknesses" is not because we're going to have to learn to live with them. It is because we have to see clearly where we are starting from in order to accurately map our journey to where we want to be. It is right to lament what is past because it can motivate you towards change. Other than that, put it behind you! The high school window is narrowing, yes, but tt is not closed. Force yourself, promise yourself to put your fear on the back burner for just TWO MINUTES. One step at a time, start to reach out. Don't think about your SELF and whether or not it will succeed, think only about what you are doing. Stay in the present moment.

Very few people retain their high school friendships for long. They tend to move on. That will place your loss in IN THE PAST, where it belongs.

BEST OF LUCK.

Answer 6

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not unavoidably could rhyme in spite of the undeniable fact that it needs to hit my thoughts. i think of clarity of expression is substantial as nicely. i do no longer want to 2d guess what i'm analyzing approximately. I continually seem for what I term "poetic gem stones"in the textual content cloth.

Answer 7

I think it's professionally done I would shorten it a bit though, for people like me with a short attention span. Bravo!! ; )

Answer 8

it's interesting. reminds me of how i felt when i was in high school, but to be honest it's kind of depressing. life does get better after high school by the way

Answer 9

ya i like it. its a bit too long, but its cute. just today i was listening to 'friends forever' by vitamin c, and looking at my high school yearbook, it made me want to cry.

Answer 10

I love it, it's a bit sad but beautiful.