Will some poetic person please rate my poem?

Question

A Tiny seed
My love for you started out like a tiny seed. It started out small, but grows every day. Your touch, your voice, your eyes, make my love for you grow each day. Just like a mighty river that runs down through the sea, but my love for you keeps growing. we were meant to be.

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this is my first poem I have ever wrote, and please tell me what I did wrong and how to make it better!! Thank you!

Answer 1

try using more abstract words, when you want to write love poems, because there are alot of love poems and the usual words just dont cut it anymore. Also maybe writing each thought in its own line would be more 'poetic'. Study love poems and then try again, you will have a better understanding of how everything works. You have alot of potential.

Answer 2

Congrats to you!

I recall my first, and in time, we develpoe our own voice. Read The Poetry Handbook and own a copy.

Poetry is supposed to be, in part, the boiled downj essence of prose. Also, poetic language is critical to paint images. Metaphor, simile, personification, ec.

Here are suggesions.

Tiny seed

My love for you started like a tiny seed,
Small, but growing daily.
Your touch, voice, eyes, made my love grow,
into a mighty river running towards the sea.