If you like this tell me...
Your friends may lie
The truth can come from strangers
If I knew why
We wouldn't be in this danger
Leaning out the window of my car
And wishing on another lucky star
Life is long
It is not made to measure
You will go on
The same in pain and pleasure
Wondering how we ever got this far
By wishing on another lucky star
Life goes on
As sure as the sky
It's come and gone
In the wink of an eye
You leave your home
On the wings of a lie:
"You will never die"
The world is cold
A heart gets torn and tattered
The one you hold
It can be dropped and shattered
Leaning out the window of my car
And wishing on another lucky star
Life goes on
As sure as the sky
It's come and gone
In the wink of an eye
You leave your home
On the wings of a lie:
"You will never die"
There's a car outside . . .
2007-01-31 12:37:03 · 10 answers · asked by captstevenfusmc 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
Good job very good job
2007-01-31 13:00:54 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Now, that is poetry! The best poem that I have ever read on Yahoo!Answers. Yes, of course, you have a couple or rhymes that are not perfect, but the poem stands strong. Some people will tell you that your poem is not that good, but this is only because they never read real poetry, they have been listening to pop music...
2007-01-31 20:50:37 · answer #2 · answered by mrquestion 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not too bad if you have a tune to go with it. Might think about the "wings of a lie" part, lies are like rats they creep up on you and bite you in the ass. Truth sores above all the lies that polute our lives. Just a thought.
2007-01-31 20:47:48 · answer #3 · answered by rjdragon4 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was ok. Not much of my style of writing or reading, but it was a good atempt. One thing that bothered me was "In the 'wink' of an eye".... i think you should put blink...
2007-01-31 20:42:58 · answer #4 · answered by tu_amor8 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i Love it, I love ryhming poems, very talented.... You set a very good imagery in this poem .... and it wasn't very hard to understand and it is very simular to what i feel sometimes and im sure many others could be relevant to it :) good job
2007-01-31 20:44:35 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
uuuhh its alright
not drop dead OMG THAT WAS SO GOOD poem but really good keep up the work
2007-01-31 20:44:54 · answer #6 · answered by BeautyBunny<3 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Please clarify.....is this actually yours or are you just copying someone else....say this?
"Wishing on Another Lucky Star"
- J.D. Souther
PLEASE GIVE A REFERENCE OR AT LEAST GIVE A DISCLAIMER DON'T GET EVERYONE TO TRY TO STAR YOU FOR SOMEONE ELSE'S HARD WORK!
IT IS CALLED PLAGERISM AND IT IS ILLEGAL!
2007-01-31 21:26:29 · answer #7 · answered by Atom 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
WOW o my gosh that is great and i mean great.... i understand allot of what it means but i don't know all of it. it rhymes beautifully
2007-01-31 20:44:40 · answer #8 · answered by AirlineBob 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Nicely done.
2007-01-31 20:42:24 · answer #9 · answered by ~Squoosh~ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's nice
2007-01-31 20:43:24 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋