Tell me if this poem is good.
If there was a way for people not to be late
It would be very great
All we need is to be able to stop time
That way teachers don't act like we committed a crime
We just press a button then we may take our time
So there is no worry about the bells chime
2007-01-31 12:26:03 · 17 answers · asked by T-Mac 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Primary & Secondary Education
Its a great poem if your teacher has a sense of humor. If he or she is a grumpy stiff it might not go over so well. I think its cute.
2007-01-31 12:29:29 · answer #1 · answered by Chris J 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well I'm a writer myself, so unless you are in like third of fourth grade, then I do not think it was very well writen. It cold use some work. No offense. By the way, if you do need help just im me or email, I'd be glad to.
2007-01-31 20:37:53 · answer #2 · answered by tu_amor8 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is one of THE best poems that ive ever read in my life. ive couldnt have done better. i think you should either turn it in your english or art teacher because you know you are writing something related to literature and then if you have art class then poems are a part of art. you get what im saying ?
2007-01-31 20:31:52 · answer #3 · answered by fariya k 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good Job
2007-01-31 20:28:58 · answer #4 · answered by j13 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it!!! but for the tech its " the bells' chime" ..hmmm, i think,
you know teachers and their fricken punctuation.
2007-01-31 20:30:38 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it reads like a 4th grader wrote it...so. if your 10 or 11..you did a good job!
2007-01-31 20:29:54 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I love it.
If you can try to change the second "time" but you don't have too, sounds great!
2007-01-31 20:29:30 · answer #7 · answered by optimake5 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Short and to the point.Very well written.
2007-01-31 20:30:50 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its great and I would not change a thing.
2007-01-31 20:30:39 · answer #9 · answered by Lea 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I think its quite good.
2007-01-31 20:32:37 · answer #10 · answered by Other sheep 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋