What do you think of my poem?

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What do you think of my poem?

Trivial winds have burdened our souls
Our minds
Our lives

While crying voices reside only briefly
In our ever deafening ears
Avarice is amplified by our
now sole desires

While the hopeless slave
To supply oil for their only lamp
We destroy to supply meat
For our belly's growing fat

Though by our treasures
We stay afloat
through life's tides
They miss their boat

So if trivialities indeed
Supply our needs
We must live in ecstasy

2007-01-31 09:45:05 · 2 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities

2 answers

Actually........I like it! gd job!

2007-01-31 09:53:17 · answer #1 · answered by Thankyou4givengmeaheadache 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋

it s prettty good!!!

2007-01-31 17:52:52 · answer #2 · answered by lalahappygurl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋