Self help poem, please rate 1 - 10 1 being the worse?

Question

Are you feeling really low
Do people tell you, it does show
Do you try to hide your fear
With bad whisky, and with beer

Do you think that’s its all right
When all you want to do is fight
Don’t you think that people know
When your acting really slow

Don’t you think you need a quest
To change your life and do your best
I bet you think, you’ll fall apart
You wont know, if you don’t start

Just lay your ducks out in a row
Day by day, it will show
Change your life and make a pack
That you surely wont go back

Hang with people who do care
You’d be surprised, there everywhere
They will know what you go thru
But they’ll help you, be brand new

Good Luck

Answer 1

10..........its amazn

Answer 2

you wrote that yourself?
there are a few things you can improve on though.. just suggestions.

Do people tell you, ( how about "people do tell you")

When your acting really slow ? -- you're talking about a fight but you're acting really slow?

I bet you think, you’ll fall apart
You wont know, if you don’t start (these are contrasting ideas, why not try a BUT you won't know)

i don't like the ducks part. too cheezy.


Change your life and make a pack (you mean pact)


You’d be surprised, there (they're) everywhere


They will know what you "go thru" (went through or going through. just choose one.)
But they’ll help you, be brand new. (AND is better instead of a But)

ill give it a 7.5

Answer 3

And you ask that is a great poem the hell with 10/10 what about 100/10. and ti miss who ever that want to in prove it you can't write your own now you have thing to say about his.

B E A Utiful poem

Answer 4

You give people alot to think about with this!!! I give you a 10 so do your best and write again!!

Answer 5

Any poem that tries to help people is great. I give it a ten.

Answer 6

great poem!

i'd give it a 10


i liked the flow of ur writing....