* * *this poem is about those akward silences everyone deals with* * *
If I really wanted to let you know all my flaws I would
but that would let the silence left me misunderstood
If there were no time for quiet how would you judge me
but then again your judging me is no guarantee
you could simply accept the person you have received
but the silence does it best, and I am deceived
so as we walk alone and that moment comes at long last
I fill the silence with that of nonsense of present, future, and past
it has won again my devious conscience has won
and yet, for now, the silence is done
2007-01-30 17:11:11 · 13 answers · asked by abbybloom1 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
yes i wrote it myself
2007-01-30 17:19:33 · update #1
it makes perfect sence to someone who has any......i like it!
2007-01-30 17:20:37 · answer #1 · answered by edward m 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
definatly it's wonerful poem but little corrections needed to this.1 you should say all about your flaws to the person whom you trust even if he doesnt like,becuse you feel lightened.if you dont share it spoils your life since one day it will come out by self.2. lonliness is what makes the diprresion arise to the point of loosing the hope in life.3. the silence would give the chance for the person to believe that you are guilty,but you should speak out the truth. this all the things that makes man happy and gets all that others cant get
2007-01-31 01:57:36 · answer #2 · answered by sudhakarsharon 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ive said it before and Ill say it again. Focus on the emotion of the poem and not finding words that rhyme. Express yourself and dont let meter and rhyming take that away from you.
2007-01-31 01:18:40 · answer #3 · answered by AbsintheLover 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Excellent Poem !!
2007-01-31 01:15:52 · answer #4 · answered by nino_n_kimmy 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i really like it cept for the 2nd last line where won is in the same sentence twice its really good *thumbs up*
2007-01-31 01:21:22 · answer #5 · answered by lizzle sizzle 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yes, it is a great poem
do write more poem
2007-01-31 01:18:34 · answer #6 · answered by sm bn 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I love it!!! A++++++++++++++++++++++++
2007-01-31 01:18:09 · answer #7 · answered by Binaツ 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
very beautiful poem.
2007-01-31 01:19:33 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
no, shouldn't it be "leave me misunderstood" in the second line... not "left?"
2007-01-31 02:17:54 · answer #9 · answered by Peabody 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it
2007-01-31 01:21:19 · answer #10 · answered by r1114@sbcglobal.net 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋