I'm Trying to Forget You!.!
It's hard!!!!!
I'm trying to forget you,
when you still want to be with me.
I think I will never be able to do it.
Remembering the things that we both went through: happiness, sadness and everything that we both shared.
Your memories are still in my heart,
and you are one of the most wonderful things that in the past I had.
Why is it hard?
When the only thing that is in my memory is you
Why I can not take this image out of my mind?
When I'm trying to forget you.
Maybe is our destiny to be like this, but separated.
You still thinking of me when,
I'm trying to forget you!!!!!!!!!!.
2007-01-30 13:50:38 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
I loved your poem, it is so real and so true. I loved it because I right Poetry to! and if someone tries to bring you down about it, dont let them, becuase inside you have special talent, so dont let anyone tease you about it.
2007-01-30 13:56:49 · answer #1 · answered by smith_kallissa 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. A poem is truly great when it paints a picture to the reader. (The picture doesn't have to be the same as anyone else's picture, but a person can truly relate to a poem when they can see it). Your poem paints the obvious picture of a girl and her ex. I can tell you are writing from experience. Keep it up.
2007-01-30 22:04:50 · answer #2 · answered by WhatTheFrenchToast? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a beginning, but you could always improve your work, no matter how good it is
what i like to do if i ever write poems, is try to make it abstract, where other people wont know what im talking about, because of the use of weird metaphors, or what... but thats so i can express my feelings without people knowing
yours is too straightforward, and he might think your still lingering on...
2007-01-30 21:54:38 · answer #3 · answered by Mr_wall2005 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It o.k
out of 10 i rate it a 7 or a 8!
I don't like it because it doesn't rhyme!
2007-01-30 21:54:23 · answer #4 · answered by lol! It's moi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A very good poem about breaking up. I like it. Keep up the good work!
2007-01-30 21:54:23 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good but try not to use the title in the poem and make it more deep use metaphors and show raw dark intense emotion.
2007-01-30 22:04:59 · answer #6 · answered by Hephaestus 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is very very good!!! I can tell that this poem is very true to your heart! Definately keep writing!
2007-01-30 21:55:09 · answer #7 · answered by Bebe 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its so touchy!
Keep it up!
COntinue writing such beautiful poems
2007-01-30 22:14:04 · answer #8 · answered by musicinme 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That depressed me actually.
2007-01-30 21:54:22 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dunno...wat r u tryin to state hear
2007-01-30 21:54:01 · answer #10 · answered by really hot girl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋