Affair
we met in the wrong place,
in the wrong time and for others
our meeting is a crime
i knew that will not last
and everything between us
should end so fast
though i knew all of this
what this will cost me
and what i 'll miss
i loved you in a painful way
i wished deep inside me
that you will stay
my immunity against you
was zero and you were
my one and only hero
then it was time to leave
how fast was that still
can not believe !
and from that day on
i can't numb the feeling
of being alone
and each time i hear a passionate
rhyme i wish you'll be back
and we can resume our crime
2007-01-30 02:39:30 · 9 answers · asked by going-to-light 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I think it is ok if this is your feeling.
It certainly conveys a mood.
However, the end is a bit awry, does it have to end on CRIME?
You are welcome
2007-01-30 02:48:41 · answer #1 · answered by saehli 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Like most teen angst garbage here on Yahoo, it's really bad. "Poetry" and this isn't it, is about imagery and illustion. It lifts the soul and expands the mind. This is just some soppy trash, and it's obvious you were dumped. And it is against the Yahoo terms of service, thus it is a violation. It's not a Q or A, you are asking for opinion.
2007-01-30 11:39:47 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
Naaaaaaaaaa
2007-01-30 13:57:55 · answer #3 · answered by mush_room609 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Your poem is a very good one b/c so many people can relate to it. Male or female. I liked it & it made me think of my past "crimes".
Very Good Poem!
2007-01-30 10:54:25 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Don't quit your day job.
2007-01-30 12:06:23 · answer #5 · answered by notyou311 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it's ok.
2007-01-30 11:09:42 · answer #6 · answered by sksogang 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
its good but decide if you're rhyming or not
2007-01-30 16:37:46 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
did this happen to you or is it a poem? if so, its a really good one...
2007-01-30 10:48:41 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
i think it ok
2007-01-30 11:48:04 · answer #9 · answered by r1114@sbcglobal.net 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋