I’ve done wrong
Its all my fault
Its to late to
Fix it
If I didn’t open up
My mouth
Those knives wouldn’t
Have flown out and into
Your heart
I cant say I know
How you feel
I don’t
How did I hurt you
How could I have done that
Don’t forgive me
I wouldn’t
If I was
You
How could I hurt you
You did no wrong
Ill try to
Blame it on
You
But it was
Me
That’s another thing wrong
And when I bring up you faults
Although they are
Imaginary
Cruel
We’re not the same
I wish I could go back
And take back
What I said
To you
My fault not
Yours
Don’t beat yourself up
2007-01-29 12:38:03 · 7 answers · asked by skiipxxaxxbeat 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I wrote it today. Suggestions are loved for improvements.
2007-01-29 12:44:20 · update #1
Free verse poem. Thank you for the grammar error.
2007-01-29 12:46:09 · update #2
Not too shabby.
"you" should be "your" though. :)
2007-01-29 12:43:42 · answer #1 · answered by Meg M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 me, it seems a lot like a couple breaking up rather than love. Nevertheless, it was good. Did u write it yourself?
2007-01-29 20:43:34 · answer #2 · answered by The Voice Inside Your Head 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not really a question or a poem or haiku..........but it does sounds like you spew venom when angry. Maybe you should work on that
2007-01-29 20:44:35 · answer #3 · answered by six_foot_2_midget 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Do not go on a guilt trip, even in your poems.
It's not healthy for one's mind.
2007-01-30 01:00:42 · answer #4 · answered by gsha 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
We all make mistakes, easier to forgive, than to hold a grudge.
Take care....
2007-01-29 20:44:18 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
um, its a little cliche to me. i'd give it a 5/10
2007-01-29 20:42:55 · answer #6 · answered by Chelly 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
don't get it are you asking a question?
2007-01-29 20:43:22 · answer #7 · answered by k-joy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋