can anyone help me with this poem?

Question

i need help of thinking of 1 metaphore and 1 more similee....
i have the poem benief for help...

Trail of Tears

The Trail of Tears
Is a historic sight,
That you can see day or night.
The cherokee tried to make peace,
But the soldiers disagreed.
Soldiers with amunition were like stanpeading horses.
Gun men forced cherokee off their land with demand.
They fought day and night and night and day till
They were defeated


theses are the metaphors and similes so far i have in this poem.
metaphor- Is a historic sight.
simile- Soldiers with amunition were like stanpeading horses.

please help....

Answer 1

Trail of Tears

The Trail of Tears
Is a historic sight,
That you can see day or night.
The Cherokee led a peaceful existence,
Much like sheep grazing on the land.
But the soldiers were greedy, and they took a stand.

The soldiers appeared like stampeding horses.
They confronted the Cherokees with demand.
The Cherokees fought back night and day
until they could no longer stand.

Their rights were taken,
Their strength was gone
and they met defeat - -
It was all so wrong.

Through unwelcome violence,
These people lost face
they became a whisper,
And soon…… were erased.

Answer 2

A shoulder Load Of Guilt

Standing alone, in such a diverse crowd
everyone reminding me of once what was allowed
No more am I to share my voice, no more am I to be proud
Constantly reminded of sins ,in my ears you scream it loud

I am but just a white man, to you nothing I have done
never have I taken a life, or stolen land from anyone
Nor did terrorize a soul with a stick, axe knife or gun
I was born here in my native land long after wars were won

If you feel you need to whip me for what was done so long ago
to strike the whip across my back, your pain is mine to know
A lash for everyone hurt over one hundred years or so
stuck so far in the past you must feel pretty low.

Answer 3

How about this for a stanza?

No more beautiful moons, will we spend on our land
In the North the Scarlett Council talks of War
And the Long Knives have massacred
The Tribe at Burnt Cove
We're not welcome in our homes anymore...

That was from a Hal Ketchum song called "Trail of Tears." Beautiful, haunting song off the album "Sure Love."

Answer 4

Check grammar and spelling after, but you already know this. Don't focus on rhyming, it's only for emphasizing the music of the words. You should experiment with different poetic meters, where there's a set amount of syllables for each line. It would also be great if you added a unique viewpoint to your poem.

Answer 5

s-their guns roared like thunder

m-the Cherokee were lions in battle

m-The soldiers' guns made them giants in the eyes of the Cherokee

check your spelling too (for example, stanpeading)

Hope you can work some of those in. Not sure your first metaphor would count, but maybe.

Answer 6

I would start off with changing the scheme of the poem to non rhyming as it's really grade 5. I would look up historical happenings on the internet.

Answer 7

As the helpless women gathered the children like a mother
does her young
The warriors dropped in thier tracks as soldiers would fire round after round.
Our small village solemn and peaceful like the orange morning sun.

Answer 8

its standpeading horses, i think you have a spelling error.




They were defeated and the trail of tears ended that sad day.

Answer 9

first, stanpeading is mispelled --> it should be stampeding

They were defeated... by their greed
If only they did not need the beads
But they had to walk 500 miles, and walk 500 miles more
To be the indians that walked 1,000 miles to fall down at your door.
Their beaty eyes and crawling hands terrified the prepubescent boys.

Answer 10

The parthenon
where the fighters charged over the weaklings