Is this a dumb poem? Is the idea just dead or irrelevant?

Question

The Composition

My hands flow over the keys,
Testing the chords,
Decding what I want,
This composition to say.

Surroundings and myself,
Join as one,
As the music plays,
As I find the expression.

The pedel is pressed down,
To hold onto that one note,
The lovely moment lasts,
To emphasize that some part of my composition was pleasent.

One hand moves quickly,
At the same time another part of my body,
Moves slowly, doing other things.
And they weave to form the music.

Some of my composition,
Is slow and sweet,
Others deep and angry,
As I sit and tell a story with my hands.

Some people adore my piece,
Others detest it.
And yet the composition does not change,
It is the same combinations, confident in itself.

Oh, how this piano piece is so like life,
My compostion of emotions.
To be loved by some,
To have so many activites all at once.

The melody is simple,
What lies beneath different.
I can decide,
What I want my composition of life to say.

As I hold the memory pedal down,
To keep the precious moments I treasure.
Life, all just a tangle of music,
Each piece different, yet all music.

As the last chord dies away,
My composition, my life, will be judged.
Standing ovation or not, it will always be,
My life, written on the barlines of time.

Answer 1

I'm not a very good judge of poetry, but I noticed you have a couple misspellings in the first two stanzas, so be sure to run spell check before you submit it anywhere.

You've got pedel instead of pedal and pleasent instead of pleasant.

Answer 2

I don't find it irrelevant at all. It could use some trimming, for there are some redundant passages, but overall it is a good start. I like your metaphor of the composition of life. Is it a sonnata, or is it a symphony...I guess that all depends on how much work goes into the composition.

Answer 3

Miss Darcy --
It's never a dumb poem if you mean it. Now, there are some who are better at expressing their emotions in words than others (you are better than I, for example), but if it's heartfelt, it's not worthless.
To make it better, start reading other poets -- see how they use rhythm, meter (or lack thereof), simile, metaphor, onomotopoeia... and remember that poetry is really meant to be read aloud. So think about how your stanzas would sound audibilized.
Good luck.

Answer 4

Its not dead yet. Work on it. Some of it has promise already. It is not irrelevant to you. Organize your ideas. Search for words read it aloud a stanza at a time. You know music, find the phrasing, find the rhythms. Practice, practice.

Answer 5

You got your ideas but you need to organized it well.

Answer 6

This is a dumb poem, the idea is dead.

Answer 7

it isn't stupid......it is about how a composer's piece conveys his feelings.......I liked it and I don't think it is stupid or dead