Nothings Black or White...
You said it was all going too fast,
That you didnt want a girlfriend,
That it would never last.
Couldnt understand why you were still lay beside me,
Stroking my skin
And saying that you want me.
Nothing is ever black and white with you,
Can never seem to be what you want me to,
If Im not enough please let me know,
Show me the door and I will go.
Im used to rejection and looking back,
But the futures like a moving map.
Will wait a while but not forever,
For us to be together,
My heart shall never want to let go,
But through empty arms the wind may blow.
2007-01-29 03:29:31 · 14 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Great poem. 10/10
2007-01-29 03:36:31 · answer #1 · answered by Hmmmmm 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
10
2007-01-29 03:35:19 · answer #2 · answered by glamour04111 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a 6
2007-01-29 03:35:22 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poem is very good, but I feel such a sadness inside you. When you say you are use to rejection, it breaks my heart. I want to know why? You deserve the best we all do! You dont have to love and not be fully loved back in return! Nobody is worth the pain I feel you are going thru, its so clear in this poem. You are special and you must tell yourself everyday I love me!!! Look in the mirror every morning and say this, it works! The more you love you, the stronger and self assured you will be.
2007-01-29 04:09:43 · answer #4 · answered by bodacious baby 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Needs to be reworded some, like the 3rd. line, couldn't understand why you were "still lay beside me", maybe change that to "can't understand why you still want to lay beside me". I think this is good, has a lot of feeling in it. Go over it again and make some minor adjustments, and sumit to one of the poetry workshops on here. You have a lot of talent for this work, good luck and keep up the good work! This is very meaningful and beautiful.
2007-01-29 03:45:50 · answer #5 · answered by Linda W 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I rate it 7 out of 10
2007-01-29 04:39:25 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Out of the night that covers me black
as pit from pole to pole
I thank whatever gods may be
for my unconquerable sole
it madder's not how straight the gate
how charged with punishments the scroll
I am the master of my fate
I am the captain of my sole
w e hensley
2007-01-29 03:44:02 · answer #7 · answered by bmebodymod 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is pretty good. I like the way you word things. I would give you 1-10 a 7.
2007-01-29 03:36:26 · answer #8 · answered by Doodle 186 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
6/10. It would make a good song.
2007-01-29 03:35:34 · answer #9 · answered by Ændru 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Decent. 6.
2007-01-29 03:43:02 · answer #10 · answered by Rachel 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋