You are a leaf on a branch, as if about to fall, but aren't quite ready
You have no voice, but are dying to speak
You cannot see, but you know that the world is beautiful
I am the wind, about to blow you off the branch
I am the muzzle covering your mouth
I am the hands shielding your eyes
But when you fall, I will be there to catch you
I will cradle you in my chest, and comfort you
And when I finally uncover your eyes, and allow you to speak
I will set you loose on the world
And you will do great things
2007-01-28 07:44:44 · 9 answers · asked by Mars 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Sounds like the kind of thing I'd write in my diary and never let anyone see, though deep down I'm dying to share it. 100 points you! This was very brave. Write more stuff. I'll be on the look out.
2007-01-28 08:01:59 · answer #1 · answered by OneFootUp 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Just maybe alter the last line. It reads very well and has a great feeling to it, but the last line sort of just drops that off. Otherwise, great!
2007-01-28 16:38:18 · answer #2 · answered by Kiara 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Muzzle, a little to S@M for me.
2007-01-28 15:52:36 · answer #3 · answered by Billy Dee 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you a new father? Congratulations!
2007-01-28 15:51:41 · answer #4 · answered by Shinigami 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well that is quite impressive
very detailed, very original
2007-01-28 15:55:13 · answer #5 · answered by Flusher 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes its wonderful
2007-01-28 15:52:25 · answer #6 · answered by hotxanthi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
beautiful!
2007-01-28 15:57:49 · answer #7 · answered by Conway 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's ok
2007-01-28 15:53:39 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes,,,,yes,yes
2007-01-28 15:53:38 · answer #9 · answered by r1114@sbcglobal.net 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋