I wrote a poem about someone I am in love with...(my best friend)...and I would like to know what people think of it...
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2311221/1/
2007-01-27 16:33:59 · 9 answers · asked by ? 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
I think that is really awesome good job its really sweet. Hope u get the courage to give it to ur friend. But just make sure he-she doenst have a bf or gf
2007-01-27 16:40:13 · answer #1 · answered by queenbee 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-16 05:07:43 · answer #2 · answered by hanrahan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all. I rather like it. The “Ticking” does seem to detract from the flow of the poem, but overall it’s really well done. What if you were to put a line of “ticks” every 5th line or so? Like four lines then “tick… tick… tick…” four lines then “tick… tick… tick…” Something like that. I think that would help the flow much better. Good job, overall. Keep up the good work. I wish I could write poetry.
And, yes, after a poem like that, I am inclined to think you probably are in love.
2007-01-27 16:49:23 · answer #3 · answered by icarus_imbued 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
awww.... honestly the "tick tick" part got a bit annoying but I think it is SO sweet you would put the effort into it for someone you love. I hope she loves it. Good luck! And by the way - best friends make the best life partners!
2007-01-27 16:39:58 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good poem but I didn't like all the "ticks". It seemed to make it unusually longer. Do you plan on giving this to that person?
2007-01-27 16:44:35 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Like others have said the ticking was kinda annoying, it would be better if you didn't have so many of them.
It was a good poem though.
2007-01-27 16:44:04 · answer #6 · answered by Ash 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it, but the ticks make me a little dizzy.
2007-01-27 16:38:37 · answer #7 · answered by bisous148 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww! dat poem was so sweet! but i dont like the tick tick part! sorry! but it was really good!
2007-01-27 16:40:33 · answer #8 · answered by 1@k3r$6!r1c#!c 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a good start...keep working on it.
2007-01-27 16:39:01 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋