Please give feedback on this poem I wrote...........?

Question

Strong minds talk about ideas
Weak minds talk about people
That is the quote I think of when I am judged
by someone is supposed to be my equal.
Sure I am different form the norm,
different from the others
But we are family - we are all sisters and brothers
We have shared history together.
Did you forget about the cotton fields, the ships, the stormy weather?
Doesn't that count for something?
Oh, I forgot that was the past so that's nothing
Here an now you're clowned because you don't wear Jordans and Baby Phat
In the words of MLK judge me by the content of my character
not by the clothes on my back
I enunciate my words and I speaking white
It's not a white or black thing
it's just I am speaking right
You call me a sell-out
because I choose not to surround my self in ignorance
I tried that route,
I sticking with knowledge, you had your chance.
So you go ahead judge me
by the way I talk, walk, and dress
I am still not changing

I'll continue to let my ideas rise to the surface

The poem is entitled The Struggle: being an educated black in the black community

THANK YOU KITTY ROGERS BUT iIHOPE YOU KNOW EVERYTHING YOU SAID JUST WENT THROUGH ONE EAR AND OUT OF THE OTHER. SORRY TRY AGAIN LOL

Answer 1

I find your poem quite stimulating and it reminds me of my favorite words by Dr. King, "When all is said and done, it is not the voices of our enemies that we will remember but the silence of our friends."

Answer 2

This is NOT a poem. It's a mish-mash of words that mean virtually nothing the way you have written them. Poetry lifts the spirit and expands the mind. It is about IMAGERY and Illusion, not about anger and teen angst because someone doesn't wear Jordan's or Baby Phat. (Say what?!) This is nothing more than an angry, blathering diatribe and is AGAINST Yahoo's terms, thus it is a violation. Poetry (and this is about as far from it as you can get) also contains punctuation. It has to have a flow and cadence. You know nothing of these things, obviously. This is really awful! And if you put this kind of tripe before the public, expect that the only ones who might like it are other angst-ridden teens who know squat about poetry. They seem to like all the tripe they read on this site. This really stinks big time! One of the absolute WORST I have read here! You asked.

Answer 3

it reminded me of an episode of fresh prince where a frat brother was giving carlton hell about being a sell out because of how he speaks and carlton tells him that black is not something that he has to try to be its what he is and that he puts up withthe same predjudices as anyone else who is black what would make a brother from the hood believe that a black cowboy would have life any easier charlie pride one of the greatest country singers ever put up with more prejudice than any rapper ever did for being who he was not what color he was he got dissed by whitey and his own race thats a double challenge now whos the sellout ps: tell kittyroges to go phuque themselves

Answer 4

There are a couple of typies, however, I like the ideas behind your words. Is this the final version?

Answer 5

um...wow...such a good poem!!!...man that basically sums up highschool for ya...lol