Like Snow
Your rosey smile in the night shone at me like a thousand stars,
It lit the room,
It lit my life,
Made something change and it felt right.
For once I didnt hold back
And you fell like snow into my heart,
Promised that we'd never part.
And that snow still lies there today,
A love that'll never melt away.
2007-01-27 05:38:51 · 12 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Short but sweet, good analogy
2007-01-27 05:47:17 · answer #1 · answered by Lo 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much (an 8) but I hope you don't mind, I made some corrections and changes.
Like Snow
Your rosy smile in the night shone like a thousand stars,
It lit the room,
It lit my life,
Made something change and it felt right.
For once I didn’t hold back
And you fell like snow into my heart,
Promised that we'd never part.
That snow still lays there today,
Love that will never melt away.
2007-01-27 14:31:20 · answer #2 · answered by Tek ~aka~Legs! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, but you need a tragedy...maybe the snow could melt and then come back the following year...like Frosty....
or like how true love never dies even if it goes away for a time :)
2007-01-27 14:01:34 · answer #3 · answered by єЖтяα ¢яιѕρψ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes that is beautiful. I love it. I give you a 10 for best.
2007-01-27 16:35:26 · answer #4 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG!!
Thats so pretty!! I love it!! I wish that I can write like that.
1-10. My girl that deseves a 30!!!
2007-01-27 13:49:20 · answer #5 · answered by Dr.DRE 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no 2 coz the no 1 is :
if i were a dog and u were a flower
I will walk over u and give u a shower
2007-01-27 13:42:46 · answer #6 · answered by A 3 1 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I love it! This made me get all teary, I'm thinking of someone really special now. Remember it doesn't have to rhyme (a few rhymes seem a little misplaced), but only take other peoples suggestions if you agree with them.
2007-01-27 13:45:06 · answer #7 · answered by polaris grl 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
That's beautiful! You are truly gifted. I give it 2 thumbs up!
2007-01-27 15:48:17 · answer #8 · answered by Mamma angel 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
VERY LOVELY- I liked it very much, shows lots of feelings for that special someone.
2007-01-27 13:48:34 · answer #9 · answered by Taz 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's beautiful!! I give it a 100!!!
2007-01-27 13:54:46 · answer #10 · answered by Stacy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋