Slow Dissipation
I’m a derelict of my own heart
Hurt, pain, being torn apart
No thank you, I do not care for any of the above
Love isn’t a requisite
Or something indispensable
It’s something you should want
Indifferent to what is expected of you
My heart’s not for you to fix
So just let the pieces lay
Because we both know
You haven’t come here to stay
A clandestine apathist
Disguised as an optimist
I am destitute of feeling
This is the only way I’m dealing
And all I feel is the slow dissipation
Of the pieces left inside me.
2007-01-27 02:28:57 · 16 answers · asked by Jaded 7 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Aww thank you everyone for all your kind words. And yes i did write it. =)
2007-01-27 23:42:12 · update #1
Very sad and deep, but cleverly written. Just one slight criticism....the line "No thank you, I do not care for any of the above" seems out of place in the verse. Ever thought of putting it to music? Good luck, you're obviously a very good writer
2007-01-27 02:39:53 · answer #1 · answered by Taylor29 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not unavoidably could rhyme besides the shown fact that it needs to hit my emotions. i think of readability of expression is critical besides. i do no longer prefer to 2d wager what i'm analyzing approximately. I continually seek for what I term "poetic gem stones"interior the textual content.
2016-11-01 10:15:29 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds complicated
2007-01-27 02:35:04 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is beautiful. It contains lots of emotion, but it seems sad. I like it when people express themselves through different interests. I am so proud!
2007-01-27 02:38:52 · answer #4 · answered by ♥Penguiin♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like an emo song
make it into one
ill buy it from you!
*smiles sweetly*
but only if its a good song
*grins dementedly*
2007-01-27 04:40:39 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's great
2007-01-27 02:34:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Didn't understand a word, so it muust be good.
2007-01-27 05:13:01 · answer #7 · answered by Melvin the retarded emu 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
youre ready
2007-01-27 02:36:39 · answer #8 · answered by High? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it, and think it should be set to music and sang!
2007-01-27 02:35:08 · answer #9 · answered by Cap'n Donna 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, that is really great. i'm kinda speechless
2007-01-27 02:35:49 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋