how can i make my ACKNOWLEDGMENTS better?

Question

I would like to express my sincerest gratitude to Dr. Edwin liu, my mentor and supervisor. I have benefited from his guidance, great kindness and patience and I wish to say a heartfelt thank you to him.
I would like to thank Dr.deider joseph for his assistance and guidance.
I would like to extend my gratitude to my sisters (Tena and Naden) for all their support, love and encouragement. And for Julia, for the joy of the difficulties we have fought together.
I would also like to thanks Dr. Uli and Dr. Tim for their help or assistance. it was a great pleasure for me

its for educational achievement for my thesis

Answer 1

I am thinking of book acknowledgments I have seen. How about...


It is my pleasure to acknowledge and sincerely thank the following people, each of whom, in their own ways, made this work not only possible, but immeasurably better than it might otherwise have been:

My sincerest gratitude to Dr. Edward Ilu. Much more than my supervisor, you are my true mentor. Your guidance, your great kindness and even greater patience continue to illuminate my way. For this, I thank you.

I am indebted to Dr. Deider Joseph, Dr.______ Uli and Dr. _________ Tim. You have been more than generous with your time and your invaluable assistance. I am grateful for the pleasure and opportunity of having worked with you.

Loving thanks to my sisters, Tena and Naden, for believing in me. As always, I treasure your love, support and encouragement.

And to Julia, my comrade-in-arms, my eternal thanks! I am grateful, enlightened and delighted because we made this journey together.

Answer 2

Hmmm...it depends on what the acknowledgment is for such as educational achievements, graduation from high school, individual recognition achievement, etc. Try to list some of the things you have accomplished with the assistance of others, paraphrase what you have already written, and now think of what each person means to you, how they have assisted you with your achievements:

(For Example and Paraphrasing)

It has been an academic adventure to attain the knowledge that I gained, with the continued support and assistance of those, who have helped me toward my goals. In true appreciation, gratitude, mentor-ship, supervision, guidance, patience, and love, I thank the following:

Dr. Edwin Liu, Dr, Uli, Dr, Tim, Dr. Deider Joseph, each of these generous souls have guided me toward my inner goals and now I not only look forward to achieving more, but I know that no matter what...it will be my best.

My foundation in life has been rooted by my beloved sisters Tena and Naden, and my true love Julia because without the love and support of these wonderful women, whom I adore, I would have three missing pieces from my life.

Although I only have these mere words to share with each of you in showing my appreciation, I am forever grateful within my heart for being lucky enough to have each of you my life. Thank you.


Just some thoughts to help you incorporate a more concise and heartfelt acknowledgement. Good luck and be Safe...(smiles)