yeah its pretty good
2007-01-26 06:14:01
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answered by sweetheartstoss25 1
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I don't really know if you want us to comment on the poem content or the structure of it. I think the structure gets lost after the first stanza. You should keep the rhyme scheme and tempo more consistent if that's what you are going for.
Regarding the content, I happen to view it as a bit stubborn and biased. But they are your views and that's what the point of a poem is: to express your views and beliefs. Any poem that does that, whether people react to it possitively or negatively, is a good poem. Poems are meant to provoke emotion and thought and that's what yours does.
So, I'd give you a B-. Not bad, but spelling and grammatical errors along with the inconsistency deducted some points.
2007-01-26 14:30:30
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answered by Xindy 4
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It's pretty good. I would recommend spell-check then enter it in a contest. You could always check out poetry.com thehy have opportunities to win lots of money and then your poem will have a copyright too!
2007-01-26 14:26:04
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answered by ♥Karoline♥ 2
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It has the potential to be good. However, the spelling mistakes, vague topic, odd line breaks and a general skipping from one thing to another keep this poem from achieving its full potential.
2007-01-26 14:20:31
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answered by JENN K 2
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It is a good effort but my friend the topic or context seems very vague......no particular subject you are targetting......and next time make sure you give a catchy title.....all d best
2007-01-26 14:15:26
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answered by Iris 1
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Sorry, not very good. Lacking deep meaning or emotion or magic of words.
2007-01-26 14:15:51
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answered by seek_fulfill 4
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wow, i liked that alot, that is really good, trust me, i like writing too, and i love reading other people writing, if you ever need another opinion here is my e-mail heartbreakersrp@yahoo.com
liked the poem alot
2007-01-26 14:32:17
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answered by JUSTAGIRL 2
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Shows talent, some wonderful lines. But please take some advice....no matter how good you are, no one will read your stuff if you spell incorrectly and use wrong grammar.
2007-01-26 14:17:04
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answered by Anonymous
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I didn't like it. sorry. it didn't really have feel and emotion in it. it kinda just felt like words, rambling on. Sorry
2007-01-26 14:26:31
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answered by Anonymous
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Yeah, it is pretty good! but there is room for improvement.
2007-01-26 14:25:21
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answered by Ldy Bug 3
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Don't quit your day job.
2007-01-26 14:18:05
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answered by notyou311 7
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