i wipe off the tears that run down this face
shackin in my seat as they listen for a heart beat
i close my eyes and start to wonder why your leaving us like this
i was the bad one i never listened
i left the messes and never bothered to help
let me tell you
listenin to the doctor say that your not gonna make it made me think of all the things i never did for you oh daddy you can make it through
oh daddy please please try. i dont want to see mommy cry. daddy daddy please try.
2007-01-25 15:50:37 · 11 answers · asked by ill shoot an arow thru ur heart! 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
honestly it's a bit melodramatic for my taste, but if you are trying to capture the voice of a young teen, it is quite appropriate.
2007-01-25 15:56:18 · answer #1 · answered by Revel 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Okay, what is "shackin"? Who are they, the ones who "listen for a heart beat"? "your" is incorrect, try you are instead."listenin" is for amateurs, try listening instead. "gonna" is the same - for amateurs. If this were corrected and arranged you would have something that I could like.
2007-01-25 16:00:15 · answer #2 · answered by WMD 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dam girl u brought a tear to my eye
2007-01-25 15:54:17 · answer #3 · answered by blue 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Like - no. Find it interesting yes. The last line blows it for me, too sappy!
2007-01-25 15:56:17 · answer #4 · answered by Roll_Tide! 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow, did u write that by yourself?? if u did, wow, thats awesome, u should be a writer, thats sweet, tohuching, and deeply awesome congrats :)
2007-01-25 15:56:37 · answer #5 · answered by brit_avyltth 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
nice
2007-01-25 16:02:23 · answer #6 · answered by BlackArtClef 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah, that was deep
2007-01-25 15:55:31 · answer #7 · answered by applebottom 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it it reminds me of my dad when he was fighting cancer. but he died.
2007-01-25 15:56:11 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
your violating copyright lyrics....
2007-01-25 15:53:57 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
oh how sweet (tear, tear )!!!!!
2007-01-25 15:54:13 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋