I wrote it myself
Your heart is racing,you feel the cold of the steel against your hand
Thoughts are running through your head,trying to think,think of somthing,anything
Looking for reasons.finding only bleeding and bruises
Trying to feel,looking for love and finding only emptyness
your mind goes back to the present,your heart feels like its going to come out of your chest
You reach for the trigger,you look back upon the past
The heartache,the pain,
It's to late to go back now,whats done is done
The past is unchangable....
And your head tells you "pull the trigger" and your heart stops
2007-01-24 23:00:07 · 10 answers · asked by katie 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
I don't care if I am depressed this is my way of expressing myself all i want is for you to tell me what you think of it
2007-01-24 23:09:16 · update #1
i think you have too much time on your hands [get a job ]
2007-01-24 23:09:01 · answer #1 · answered by booge 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As far as expression....excellent...... because I can relate to this feeling. There was a period in my life that I experienced feeling exactly this way. Honestly. I had flashbacks as i read this. You are so right what is done is done, ... te past is unchangeable.....so true, so be it.
I hope that all you want is our opinion about your poem/expression and that you are not going through this as we speak.
My honest opinion, its excellent, very good expressions....though it leaves me worried about you. I hope you no longer feel this way. I am here for you, if you want to talk about it. I know this feeling-it was the worst time of my life. Its over, I survived it, and most importantly, I let it go...... and that is how I moved on. I stopped asking why me, stopped being angry and hurt, forgave him and myself. So you are not alone, if you feel that way. I am here, and I have been there too. So I know. Email me if you need to vent, at least please let me know that YOU ARE OK.
2007-01-25 07:50:16 · answer #2 · answered by jana808 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you are very creative in the context in which you describe your feelings. You should pursue a writing career as you feel it's a way to get your feelings out.
Having said that I do think you need to also speak with a real person who can help you sort these dark feelings. You are worth saving and I am concerned for you.
2007-01-25 07:31:59 · answer #3 · answered by Grianagh 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good but very depressing.Could you look in the past,learn from the mistakes and go on with life with a smile on your lips.
2007-01-25 07:06:31 · answer #4 · answered by ANU U 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you ok why would you wright some thing like that. I you need to talk contact me ok
2007-01-25 07:06:09 · answer #5 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well you are depressed-been there. Seek professional help, and love yourself first. It will get better with time. Seek God and this will heel your emptyness.
2007-01-25 07:08:16 · answer #6 · answered by amy p 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really creative girl , the way you describe the moment...
and the suspence you create ....but its kind of short , put some more effects in it...
2007-01-25 07:06:52 · answer #7 · answered by sam 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!
2007-01-25 07:06:29 · answer #8 · answered by Tami H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Why don't you take some writing coarses???
2007-01-25 07:12:26 · answer #9 · answered by winona e 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you suicidal? If so, please talk to someone.
2007-01-25 07:22:46 · answer #10 · answered by spelling nazi 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋