This is the new version of it.
Her face showed no sign of the emptiness she felt, her broken heart was hidden under layers of lies that she herself had spun.
Starved for attention and craving the love she never had, the girl lost her self in a sea of false hopes and rejection.
Her plea’s for attention were ignored by the ones she loved most, her crying was never heard and her real feelings never shown.
People envied her, but no one felt the hurt she felt, never cried as much as she cried, never was rejected so many times. She hurt inside, but no one cared.
She had tried so hard, she felt so empty.
The girl had lost count of the times she had tried and failed for there attention.
It was a race that seemed to have no finishing line, she felt drained, she was giving up, one more step and she would stop, and reach for the gun that would set her free.
Additional info..
She's 12.
2007-01-24 18:44:03 · 2 answers · asked by made_up_cinderella 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
What is the general text like? How could she make it better, punction and grammer help as well.
2007-01-24 18:44:46 · update #1