I have all my writing posted on my geocites home page.
http://www.geocites.com/deahwest.
Please read all blogs and get idea of how I write and what motivates me before you answer.
2007-01-24 09:18:24 · 3 answers · asked by deahwest 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I have been writing a while and have taken several creative writing classes in the past. I also have good reviews from the people in those class in high school and the professors in the collegiate classes.
2007-01-24 09:20:59 · update #1
try this link.
http://www.geocites.com/deahwest/index.html
2007-01-24 09:35:41 · update #2
Thanks to Jack C for catching the error in the web address.
http://www.geocites.com/deahwest.index.html
2007-01-24 09:53:51 · update #3
the site is www.geocites.com/deahwest.
2007-01-26 09:59:10 · update #4
there is a typo in the link... it should be geocities.com/deahwest.
anywho... The beginning is very, very, very weak. What do I care about hot fryers trumpeting or fish frying in oil? In short fiction, the opening has to be compelling, attention grabbing, and give a reason to the reader to want to continue reading. After your weak opening, I didn't care to continue.
Also, I believe there is a mixed points of view. (She looks with blurred vision... I collapse). Something isn't right there.
I am sorry, I just had a very tough time following.
Keep writing, though. If that is what you love doing, follow your heart.
2007-01-24 09:36:14 · answer #1 · answered by Jack C 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sorry, the link doesn't work so i couldn't access any of your stuff
2007-01-24 17:26:17 · answer #2 · answered by wordwitty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the link won't open for me
2007-01-24 17:25:01 · answer #3 · answered by Holly S 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋