live the sin
though am filled with faith
but you charm me more than heaven
for you i will do all the sins
believe me i'll do the whole seven!
i spent my life so bored but when i saw you
i realized that life worth to be livin'
with a glance you knew my code
gave me a thrill never been given
2007-01-24 08:59:56 · 14 answers · asked by going-to-light 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
it's good, sounds like it could be a song, although christian rock groups would shun it! lol.
2007-01-24 09:05:09 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
The basic concept of the poem is good, but it is hard to read through. You should change some of the words to make it it easier to read. I think you should geet rid of the first line.
You charm me more than heaven,
For You i'll break the seven,
I speant my life so bored,
Now i know lifes worth livin'
2007-01-24 17:09:33 · answer #2 · answered by ACE-MAN 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
CLIFF KLINGENHAGEN had me in to dine
With him one day; and after soup and meat,
And all the other things there were to eat,
Cliff took two glasses and filled one with wine
And one with wormwood. Then, without a sign
For me to choose at all, he took the draught
Of bitterness himself, and lightly quaffed
It off, and said the other one was mine.
And when I asked him what the deuce he meant
By doing that, he only looked at me
And smiled, and said it was a way of his.
And though I know the fellow, I have spent
Long time a-wondering when I shall be
As happy as Cliff Klingenhagen is.
Your answer is why Cliff drank the wormwood.
2007-01-24 17:10:12 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i looked into your eyes
and knew exactly what to do
youre amazing and kool
theres no one like you
i felt no fear
as i stepped up to the plate
i gave you a smile
and asked you on a date
sorry got carried away ;-) yeah, i like it, its got soul!
keep writing... it helps
2007-01-24 17:13:27 · answer #4 · answered by fireman sam 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not if you like to do sins, it means the person will do all the sins for another person
2007-01-24 18:55:10 · answer #5 · answered by emmoly94 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No live your own life and make your own diciesion
2007-01-24 18:31:00 · answer #6 · answered by femio2 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry cannot work out the question, you lost me after 'sins'
2007-01-24 17:21:29 · answer #7 · answered by Gringo L 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its pathetic
2007-01-24 17:04:38 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
v nice :)
peace out :)
wats it for a song or a poem?
2007-01-24 17:03:40 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
yeah girl gooooooooooood
2007-01-24 17:03:26 · answer #10 · answered by baby p 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋