Do you mind if I start?
It was a bright and sunny morning, the smell of the automatic coffee maker was filling the house. I started to jump out of bed when I noticed.....................next?
2007-01-24 05:06:54 · 9 answers · asked by Wood Smoke ~ Free2Bme! 6 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
...started to jump out of bed when I noticed a floating body. It was the corpse of my late husband, Johnny.
(Wood Smoke, tell me if you want me to continue from your story or the one above me. I've tried to stay true to all of them, it's a little confusing).lol this is crazy.
2007-01-24 06:00:05 · answer #1 · answered by Habt our quell 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well my original thoughts: Thank goodness this is a real book about real girls with real problems, like you said you wanted it to be anti-Gossip Girl. But it kind of is a typical HS drama, with some lesbian/bicuriousness thrown in. It is a good book concept, it's just not my perfect idea of a HS drama. But it would work. I think freshman is a little young for this whole lesbian thing to be going on. Very few people are bi/lesbo at my school, and they usually switch late into their sophomore year or early into the junior year. One girl did it in 8th grade, but it was only to make her parents mad, and it never went farther than having the title of 'going out'. To up the age, while still having the 'people change when they get into high school', you could do what our HS does. The freshman stay in the Jr. High. And then as sophomores, they go to the HS building and are an actual part of the HS. Whether or not the story works all depends on how you write it. If you pay a lot of attention to literary pieces like foreshadowing, irony, etc, without distracting from the story line, you'll be good. Have a very strong tone and theme and focus a lot on character development, instead of making it a tabloid update on the latest gossip. Scrutinize your work very carefully for these things before submitting it to a publisher or self-publishing. And don't forget to market if you do get published. It's how a lot of these horrendous books are becoming super popular to young adult/teen readers. But it's a wonderful idea. I would probably read it. And don't be discouraged if you're rejected. Just keep fighting and revising and making it better. Hopefully I can see your book in Barnes and Noble one day. =)
2016-05-24 04:35:46 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poor Johnny. His fingers were wrinkled and his body was pale.
He looked miserable...just floating like that. But, it was time to get up and go to work. So I hopped out of bed and jumped into the strange pool standing in the middle of the bedroom. Nothing like a morning bath , I thought as I waded past "Dear Ol' John" !!!!
2007-01-24 07:01:24 · answer #3 · answered by honiebyrd 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
And as he hadn't shaved for a while I used him to exfoiliate my legs, he was just lying there, what could I do? he always liked to be useful in life so I thought Id carry it on in his afterlife......
2007-01-24 07:37:41 · answer #4 · answered by Yo Mum Mum 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
was the only person in the house! Everyone else had evacuated, leaving me there! Not knowing what to do, I...
2007-01-24 05:52:26 · answer #5 · answered by Sephisabin 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I had landed in water! What the heck is going on I thought as I reached for my....
2007-01-24 05:10:55 · answer #6 · answered by Lt. Dan reborn 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
(continued from...as I reached for my...)
...life raft only to discover that it wasn't there. I tried to scream out for help but realized that I...
2007-01-24 05:40:31 · answer #7 · answered by Ashnal 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
the time and that I was really late for work. So I had to hussle to get ready and I ......
MJ
2007-01-24 05:12:49 · answer #8 · answered by Mr. Jeff - It is what it is ☺ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
...a reflection in the mirror. Omg, could that be...........?
2007-01-24 05:13:09 · answer #9 · answered by Babs 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋