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Question

(this is only a part of a paragraph, cause i can't fit it all) There is no regard for the ones they are exploiting in third world countries,as long as a profit is made for the shareholders to be satisfied.As mentioned in The Corporation, the clothing and shoe company,Nike only offers their workers in Indonesia on average $600-$700 a year.This is significantly lower than an average American’s month’s work of pay.To reduce expenses even further, they even break down labour time to fractions of a second.They claim to help the countries by providing them jobs but they only open up these factories in underdeveloped countries to take advantage of their low wages.Other than the fact that they are exploiting the underprivileged,many of these factories that they are working in are in poor condition.A toy-manufacturing factory in China, with Disney as their big customer,is highly in poor condition.Equipment that are used for assembling toy parts together are not safely built for the workers

Answer 1

There is no regard for the ones they are exploiting in third world countries,as long as a profit is made for the shareholders to be satisfied.As mentioned in The Corporation, the clothing and shoe company,Nike only offers their workers in Indonesia on average $600-$700 a year.This is significantly lower than an average American’s month’s work of pay.To reduce expenses even further, they even break down labor time to fractions of a second.They claim to help the countries by providing them jobs but they only open up these factories in underdeveloped countries to take advantage of their low wages.Other than the fact that they are exploiting the underprivileged,many of these factories that they are working in are in poor condition.A toy-manufacturing factory in China, with Disney as their big customer,is highly in poor condition.Equipment that are used for assembling toy parts together are not safely built for the workers

Answer 2

AS LONG AS THERE IS A PROFIT TO BE MADE, THERE WILL BE NO REGARD FOR PEOPLE IN THIRD WORLD COUNTRIES. As mentioned in ^^^ " ^^^ The Corporation ^^^ " ^^^, the clothing and shoe company, Nike only offers their workers in Indonesia AN average $600-$700 a year. This is significantly lower than an average PAY FOR AN American’s month’s work. To reduce expenses even further, NIKE breakS down labor time to fractions of a second. They claim to help the countries by providing them jobs but open factories in underdeveloped countries AND take advantage of their low wages. Many of these factories are in poor condition. FOR EXAMPLE, ONE toy-manufacturing factory in China, with Disney as the big customer, is in poor condition.