need help writing a thesis statement?

Question

*an issue that has become verylarge in the eye of many isemployee privacy rights.*

Answer 1

You would be better to turn it around: "Employee privacy rights is an issue that has become very large in the eyes of many."

Or say it more directly: "Many people now recognize the importance of employeee privacy rights."

Answer 2

A good thesis statement should point out your argument/point of view. So, what about employee privacy rights? Why is this an issue? Are you posing a solution or arguing a point?