duplicate a poem?

Question

This Is Just to Say
by William Carlos Williams
I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold


Can you guy make a poem like that?

Here's my

I have taken
your bicycle
that were in
the garage

and which
you were probably
going
to school

Forgive me
it was available
so fast
and so stylish.

It's dumb. I know I know. Can you guys make a poem that has more emotion. But it has to be something that is tangible....

That's why it's hard

it's just draft!

you know...sometimes it's not good to say stupid.

who knows someday you'll need that stupid thing?

Answer 1

how about


I have taken
the money
that were in
you room

and which
you were probably
saving
for toys

Forgive me
it was there
so thick
and so much





for this part

and which
you were probably
saving
for toys

It's funny, I'm about to say "the money that you were prob. saving to buy toys" but there are lots of words.

anyone knows how to fix it?

Answer 2

I think your poem is good, not dumb! I can just edit it a little:

I have taken
your bicycle
that was in
the garage

and which
you were probably
going to use
to go to school

Forgive me
it was available
so fast
and so stylish

Hope I helped a little. Good luck!

Answer 3

After all
The pointless fights
And all the times
I've cried at night
And all the cuts
That made me bleed
And heartake that
You've brought to me
And all the tears
That I have cried
And all the pain
I've felt inside
I hope that you
Will one day see
You still mean more
Than life to me
But since you've had
Some second thoughts
Forget all my
"Forget-Me-Not"s
And break my heart
Again once more
I'll hide the pain
Just like before...

Sorry it's not the best...i wrote it a while ago

(btw...i dont know what "Tangible" means!! sry!"

Answer 4

"I have taken
your bicycle
that were in
the garage"

It should be that WAS in the garage. (Proper grammar)

Eh I don't like the poem you have to copy (by William Carlos Williams)... it's really unpoetic, if you ask me. lol It stinks that you have this assignment. But anyway, since it's suppose to sound a bit silly, yours fits what you are suppose to do, so I'd keep it.