Can someone read my research paragraph and tell me what I should change or edit?

Question

“Eight hundred thousand Tutsis killed in a hundred days--that’s five and a half lives terminated every minute” (Gourevitch 133). The deaths of these Rwandan Tutsis are the result of the 1994 genocide committed by the Hutus in Rwanda. Ethnic conflicts between the two groups can be traced to the early 1800s, when the Tutsi minority held most of the powerful political positions while the Hutu majority were mainly peasants. However, the two groups spoke the same language, intermarried, and followed the same religion without partitions until the Germans colonized Rwanda (Bodnarchuk 17). The Germans favored the Tutsis for their supposed “fine oval faces, large eyes, and high noses” (Gourevitch 52). Doing so forcibly separated the so called “superior race” of the Tutsis from the Hutus (52). One author who researched these ethnic distinctions were researched is Philip Gourevitch, who traveled to Rwanda to interview survivors of the genocide so he can understand why the genocide began in his history, We Wish to Inform You That Tomorrow We Will be Killed With Our Families. In his history, Gourevitch particularly explores the physical and economic differences between the Hutus and Tutsis as the driving force behind nightmare.

I know to italicize lol. Also, I cannot make my own statement. This is a research paper. I cannot change a quotation either (in the statistic <3pirate). But thanks for the help

Answer 1

sounds great! just dont use "that's" say "that is" it looks better for teachers
hope you get an "A"!

Answer 2

“Eight hundred thousand Tutsis killed in a hundred days--that’s ALMOST SIX LIVES (you cant have half a life die) terminated every minute” (Gourevitch 133). The deaths of these Rwandan Tutsis are the result of the 1994 genocide committed by the Hutus in Rwanda. (WHERE IS RWANDA....just a sentence about location here incase some1 doesnt know). Ethnic conflicts between the two groups can be traced to the early 1800s, when the Tutsi minority held most of the powerful political positions while the Hutu majority were mainly peasants. However, the two groups spoke the same language, intermarried, and followed the same religion without partitions until the Germans colonized Rwanda (Bodnarchuk 17). The Germans favored the Tutsis for their supposed “fine oval faces, large eyes, and high noses” (Gourevitch 52). Doing so COMMA THE GERMANS forcibly separated the so called “superior race” of the Tutsis from the Hutus (52). One author who researched these ethnic distinctions DELETE~were researched~DELETE is Philip Gourevitch; he traveled to Rwanda AND interviewED (switching of tenses...BAD) survivors of the genocidePERIOD. He wrote ITALISIZE~We Wish to Inform You That Tomorrow We Will be Killed With Our Families~ ITALISIZE ABOOK ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE GENOCIDE. In THIS history, Gourevitch particularly explores the physical and economic differences between the Hutus and Tutsis as the driving force behind nightmare.

the CAPITAL letters are changes i made. compare with your para.

ialso added some notes.

keep in mind: its always best to write in present tense. dont switch tenses in the middle of an essay. its like saying:
George likes playing baseball. He played it alot. (PLAYS)
in some cases you have to switch tenses but most of the time you can keep your essay in the same tense.
underline/italisize title of books.

Answer 3

You are spending too much time telling the reader what other people said and not enough saying something yourself. Cut down on, in particular, the stuff from Gourevitch and especially do not begin with a quotation. Make a statement of your own.

Good luck.