what is my thesis statement?

Question

Today's workforce in the United States of America is estimated to be 165 million people. An issue that has become very large in the eyes of many is that of employee privacy rights. I intend to demonstrate through the following points that this is a significant area that is not being adequately protected by the present laws. I will further supply suggested methods of improving this situation so that all employees are adequately protected.

My evidence includes references to numerous newspaper articles and magazines.

Firstly, the laws are not clear as to the exact definition of employee privacy, which opens the door to abuse by employers and the general public.

Answer 1

"Privacy Rights for employees of the US in dire need of re-write."




Statement of a theory that is put forward as a premise to be mainteined or proved. In other words, a statement that articulates the purpose of a research paper. (The hypothesis that the research is trying to prove with the research.)


A very short summary of the thesis, often in one or two sentences. Your thesis statement should appear in the first couple of paragraphs of your term paper.

Answer 2

An issue that has become very large in the eyes of many is that of employee privacy rights.

However I would rewrite it to give stronger impact, it kind of blends in with the rest of the paragraph and you want it to almost jump off the page at the reader. There should be no question what you are planning on proving and exploring!

Answer 3

Employee's privacy rights.

Answer 4

How about: "Privacy rights of the employee and stuff."?

Answer 5

Yeah, you might want to try to rewrite that making sure your thesis is very clear. I could almost see possibly three different ones.

Answer 6

The last sentence in your introductory paragraph.