I am not a poet, but I got upset today, at work, and this is the only way I can safely let it out right now.
I Hate.
I hate.
I hate.
Feeling sad
Feeling stupid
Wanting to do for myself
HATING that I am…
Feeling like I can’t vent
Having nowhere I can go
And talk
SAFELY- without reproach
Without someone answering
Always having a solution.
Is it right for me to just want
To feel-Without having to fix?
What is “right”?
I don’t want to hate at all
I just want to help
Not chastised for what I haven’t done.
I need to vent, I hurt inside.
2007-01-23 01:18:46 · 8 answers · asked by juicy13500 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
You are all so kind- and I do like constructive critcism. I guess it takes strong emotion to make me put feelings to words.
Hope you all have a wonderful day!
2007-01-23 01:37:27 · update #1
Wow, that really is very good. you don't think you're a poet, but you very well could be. you created a vivid atmosphere.
Very good.
2007-01-23 01:34:58 · answer #1 · answered by Skippy 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
um, i think it shows a lot of anger i can relate the answer i came up with stop the pain and put me out of my misery not the right answer it is actually be happy look forward to life because when you are almost "dead" the worst of it has happened also true friends don't hurt but fake ones do it just breaks your heart don't act like anything but yourself and true friends will like you and stand up for you.
2007-01-23 02:35:07 · answer #2 · answered by chi_jessie 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I feel like it starts off so strong and then tapers off at the end especially by "I just want to help".
2007-01-23 01:31:38 · answer #3 · answered by doomed 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is very expressive. I'm sure there are a lot of people who would relate to it.
2007-01-23 01:23:11 · answer #4 · answered by Cookie Preston 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think you are venting through your poem, way to go!
2007-01-23 02:30:58 · answer #5 · answered by plaplant8 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a good frist draft.
2007-01-23 02:06:21 · answer #6 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm....I would give it the title of "Shades of PMS" and email it to my ex.
LOL
2007-01-23 01:29:37 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
congratulation!!! your poem is very good!!
CIAO!!!
2007-01-23 01:28:09 · answer #8 · answered by Giugi! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋