I'm doing a mythology essay on Perseus and Medusa. It needs a thesis statement. I have no Idea what to put as the thesis statement. This is what I got for the intro so far:
If you were faced with the trouble of having to kill a monster in order to please your king would you? Young Perseus did. He kilt Medusa the woman that was so ugly that she turned any man to stone with just one look. He kilt her a way that no one would ever think of ever trying. Some say he couldn’t have done it without the help of the gods.
Is that good? If not than please help me. My sister and Mother and brother are sleep and the project is due tommorow please help me even though I should have been done it.
2007-01-22 15:58:55 · 7 answers · asked by maxxie 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
He 'kilt' her? I think you mean 'killed'! General advice - do not start an essay by asking a question. Make a brief and bold statement, something along the lines of. 'In days gone by, a good subject would do anything that his king commanded, and that would sometimes include killing an enemy. Medusa was an enemy - she would turn a man to stone by just one look - and the young Perseus was commanded by his king to kill her. The task as so difficult that it was more thatn likely that he was helped by the gods to complete it. In this essay, I am good to examine ...' and go on to say what it is you are intending to do / prove / show n the essay.
2007-01-22 16:11:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 3⤋
It is always good to plan your essay, especially if you aren't confident in writing one.
So 1 - PLAN
2-Intro...this should introduce the subject you are writing about and explain how you are going to answer the question
3-Paragraphs. If the essay asks your opinion, then you MUST back up your ideas with evidence, and quotes if possible. You should aim for 3-5 paragraphs for an average essay.
4-A conclusion. This should be the 'icing on the cake' if you like. You need to finish with (if the essay is asking your opinion) an answer to the question, explanation of why you believe that this is true. If not a question, then you must sum up the story, and perhaps give your opinion of it
5- Proof read and check for mistakes. Read it through again,twice. Look for any punctual mistakes, spelling errors or things that aren't gramatically correct (that don't make sense). As a first I think you should start with the fact that killed is spelt k-i-l-l-e-d and not kilt! Use your dictionary to help. If you are unsure of anything you have written, for example facts about the story, I would cut this out as it is best to have in your essay facts that you are certain are legit.
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2007-01-23 03:49:52 · answer #2 · answered by ellietricitycat 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a great subject matter.
Think of this as a "famous person" and you are telling a crowd of people about it. Don't start with a question, start with a bold statement of fact.
In a bold move Perseus slayed Medusa in a mere reflective moment. Many doubted his ability and thought only the gods could help him in this endeavor. Since the evil Medusa could kill a man when they even glanced at her hideous being. This fierce creature had a scalp covered in serpents and she was the most venomous of them all. Fueled by hatred, she destroyed many lives by turning them to stone when they stood before her and gazed at the monster. Upon consideration and cleverness, our hero Perseus used his own shield as a tool to protect and reflect her image so that he could slay her.
Good luck!
2007-01-22 16:45:07 · answer #3 · answered by Denise W 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perseus was a young and triumphant hero in mythology, as he slayed the best Medusa with a bit of genius that many say would not have been possible without the help of the gods.
2007-01-22 16:19:49 · answer #4 · answered by tieshantiger 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Barberry has done a great job in organising your grammar and that is a very bold and capturing introduction so well done...
you then obviously need to go on to state what your intentions are for the rest of the essay and here is where you type in your thesis statement.. perhaps start by saying This essay aims to look at.........with the intention of proving...( the thesis statement).....
Try not to write in the first person (e.g. "I will be looking at").. where possible just refer to "this essay" or, if necessary "the writer/author" as this comes across a lot better in writing.
without knowing what your essay title is or what you have written for the rest of the essay it is very difficult to come up with a thesis statement for you..
I would think that you have answered a particular question somewhere in your essay and you have a particular point of view on the topic that you have been trying to get across in the rest of the essay.. Sum up this point of view as your thesis statement.
good luck to you :)
2007-01-22 22:54:23 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that's a great introduction, but your grammar and punctuation aren't good.
If you were faced with the task of killing a monster in order to please your king, would you? Young Perseus did. He killed Medusa, the woman who was so ugly that she turned men to stone with just one look. He killed her in a way that no one else would have tried. Some say he couldn’t have done it without the help of the gods.
Good luck!
2007-01-22 16:07:45 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think you should find the aim and objectives of the thesis. After found it, pls step by step to plan how to write it.
2007-01-22 17:03:01 · answer #7 · answered by Jessica C 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋