Can anyone please proofread this short article for me? Thank you!?

Question

The handmade fabric cake has been very popular among Japanese girls for many years! In this flyer you can see Amy’s creative products. Amy uses the materials she imported from Japan and her skill to craft the incredibly cute music boxes! You can watch and listen how these spinning music boxes actually look like at www.youtube.com/~~
It takes Amy an average of 7 hours to craft a music box, and approximately one hour to craft a key chain. Please be very patient with her so she can make sure she crafts every single music boxes ordered in nicest quality. The prices are reasonable for fundraising. Amy’s ideas are very original and she hopes to bring more publicity of handmade fabric cake to people around the world.
Music boxes are meant to be memorable. It brings lots of memories from childhood. It is also great gifts for your best friends and #1 birthday gift!! Unfortunately I do not have a sample in my house. The actual product might be slightly different from pictures, but you can trust Amy! You will be very satisfied when you receive the items you ordered! Thank you for supporting People to People Student Ambassador Program!
From Lee and Amy

The tag on the fabric cake will be changed to “for you” if the song is not Happy Birthday. Each one of the music box will be wrapped with boxes/bags with a beautiful card.
Spinning music box diameter 9 cm (3.54 inches), height 5.5 cm (2.16 inches)
Little key chain diameter 4 cm (1.57 inches), height 2.5 cm (.98 inches)
Heart shaped storage box maximum diameter 9 cm (3.54 inches), height 5 cm (1.96 inches)
*Because each product is unique so the size and some details may slightly vary from the pictures in this flyer.

Answer 1

Amy uses the materials she imported from Japan (comma) and her skill............

You can watch and listen how these spinning music boxes actually (work) at www.youtube.com..............

..........so she can make sure she crafts every single music (box) ordered in..............

Amy's ideas are very original (period) Through her creations she hopes to bring more publicity of handmade fabric.............

They bring lots of memories from childhood.

They are also great gifts for your best friends (period) They are a #1 birthday gift!

Scratch the sentence "Unfortunately I do not have a sample in my house.

Each item is unique, and the actual product may be slightly different from pictures............

Each one of the music (boxes) will be (delivered in a gift box/bag with a beautiful card.

Because each product is unique (comma) the size and some details may slightly vary...............



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Answer 2

Please be very patient with her so she can make sure she crafts every single music boxes ordered in nicest quality.

- grammar needs work (Box, not boxes)

Amy’s ideas are very original and she hopes to bring more publicity of handmade fabric cake to people around the world.

- grammar

Music boxes are meant to be memorable. It brings lots of memories from childhood

-Memory is redundant,
-"they bring"

It is also great gifts for your best friends and #1 birthday gift

- They are also...

Each one of the music box (s/b boxes)

- may slightly vary
(vary slightly)

Answer 3

You can watch and listen how these spinning music boxes actually look like at www.youtube.com/~~

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You can see and here what these spinning music boxes actually look and sound like at www.youtube.com/~~
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Please be very patient with her so she can make sure she crafts every single music boxes ordered in nicest quality

-X-

Please be very patient with her so that she can make sure she crafts every single music box and/or key chain ordered in its best quality.
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Music boxes are meant to be memorable. It brings lots of memories from childhood.

-X-

Music boxes are meant to be memorable, they bring lots of memories from childhood.
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It is also great gifts for your best friends and #1 birthday gift!!

-X-

They also make great gifts for your best friends and an number one birthday gift!!
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Each one of the music box will be wrapped with boxes/bags with a beautiful card.

-X-

Each one of the music boxes will be wrapped with either a box or a bags and with a beautiful card.
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*Because each product is unique so the size and some details may slightly vary from the pictures in this flyer.

-X-

*Because each product is unique the size and some details may slightly vary from the pictures in this flyer.

Those are the only things I would change. The rest sounds great!

Answer 4

You don't need to use exclamation points (!). Periods will be fine.
The sentence that begins "Please be very patient..." should end as "every single music box ordered in the highest quality."
In the second paragraph, "They bring lots of memories..." not it brings. And you should say "They are also great gifts...and the number-one birthday gift."
"Each one of the music boxes" instead of "box" and "will be packaged in" not "wrapped with"
Remove "Because" at the beginning of the last sentence.

Answer 5

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