to a poem I'm writing?
The scent of decay
is a pleasant one
for I am a vulture
feeding what ceases to live
Over the rotting filth
I scan and search
for the carcass
most worthy of my cause
2007-01-21 19:34:12 · 6 answers · asked by Cornesan 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
lovely
I think you mean "eating" or "feeding ON" what ceases to live
2007-01-21 19:38:07 · answer #1 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You got s good start, but please consider 1 or 2 suggestions: the verb "to scan" is rather technical, try to find an equivalent; in the first two lines it would be good if you made a small poetic licence (Like: Pleasant the scent/ Of decay to me feels).
Good luck!
2007-01-22 06:19:00 · answer #2 · answered by alsvalia_jackson 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is good. But end it in a way thats worth a vulture's life.
2007-01-22 03:42:23 · answer #3 · answered by Popatlal 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
...culture vulture.
2007-01-22 03:47:14 · answer #4 · answered by saumitra s 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
cooooool n creepyyyyy......i write such poems too.....its really gud....
2007-01-24 10:11:45 · answer #5 · answered by Amy Watson 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it its cool! keep it up :)
2007-01-22 03:42:18 · answer #6 · answered by guess what? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋