you know ho you are,
you are the one who stripped my whole life from me,
the one who hurt me, and said that you loved me at the same time.
the one who controlled me and everything i did.
yet i still loved you back
you know who you are
the one who had my family between your fingers,
you were the one who had them turn their backs on me when i needed them most, it was you who they believed, not me.
i dont understand how you did it,but you did,and you did it well
i would ask why you would hurt me so badly
you said becaus you liked to see me bleed and beg you for my life
it was you that made that i couldnt even leave my own home with out fear, it was you who put these scares on me,i have always
prayed that happiness would come again. but i know it wont.
i know who you are and you know who you are.
this was inspirred by an abusive situaion with my parents
i wrote it 3 years ago when i was 11
2007-01-21 14:03:55 · 11 answers · asked by koi 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
i remember when u showed me that poem and u made me promise to never talk about it, its good girl !!(LUV U)
2007-01-21 14:13:24 · answer #1 · answered by TyreL 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, dear, I have to say that it was a pretty good poem for an 11 year old. It certainly shows a lot of emotion. I hope you don't feel that way now, though. If you do, you have to let go of those negative and fearful feelings. At your age, you need to have fun and joy in your life. If you can't talk to your parents, find another adult that you trust, such as your pastor, a teacher or a counselor at school. Then write a poem that expresses happiness. Negative feelings can be very destructive.
2007-01-21 22:14:35 · answer #2 · answered by gldjns 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not really my style. To easy to understand. It's just too informative. I like the mystery ones.. you just, in my opinion, put sentences together saying what happened, in a form of lines, and thats it. But your were 11, so ill give you it to you. not bad.
2007-01-21 22:20:27 · answer #3 · answered by Brandon D 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For an 11 yr old it's all right.
2007-01-21 22:08:08 · answer #4 · answered by melsmariposa 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I can't even begin to imagine what happened to you.
I hope that you have peace and joy in your life, you deserve at least that much.
It is good.
I hope you are safe now!
Peace and blessings......
2007-01-21 22:11:36 · answer #5 · answered by dark_firmament 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's off your chest now!
Just hang in there
2007-01-21 22:39:32 · answer #6 · answered by ♫ayayay♫ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is awesome.
Put it to music and you really got something.
2007-01-21 22:08:42 · answer #7 · answered by Bye Bye 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Fix up the typos, it might work!
2007-01-21 22:08:04 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice, its also really really deep
2007-01-21 22:08:49 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty deep. it's good
2007-01-21 22:09:58 · answer #10 · answered by fiveyearwinterkiss 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋